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Razor blade Edge

We live on the edge
Of razor blade, wearing the badge of insanity
Reason is the blood flowing
Spills blurs the fragile eyes
The dark blood still runs, purges
Our inner crackings, those splinters
It has always been a flood
Love is the reasonable dripping
Subsides into the deepest mud
Roaring tornado crushes the green bud
The wind was gone
The sounds of blood dropping on the stone
We hear the philosopher is coming back

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Written November 5th, 2006

A contest entry

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  • Cinnarry gold member
    November 5, 2006
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    Very well done. I would also check the grammatical concern of L2 as suggested.


  • individuality gold member
    November 5, 2006
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    maybe saying razor blades or a razor blade? a good poem, good imagery used. i wish that you have good luck in this contest you have entered. spill ink and twist me into the crazy shape of love...