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The Wall


Brick after brick
You place them in a row,
Rivulets of sticky “emotions”
Oozing from there,
Very steady and slow.

The wall with an entrance is built
Between you and me,
“Silence” strengthens it more.
Only “speaking up” is the door’s key.

So don’t hang up the phone
Or don’t avoid my glances,
It has to be Now or Never,
To fill up the breach or…
We may not get too many chances.

Author notes

Sometimes in life ure best friend/boyfriend gets angry with you but doesn't want to say it. Silence takes place between you and him.
Written November 5th, 2006

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  • nilav
    January 11, 2007
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    the wall as a metaphor of human emotion is beautifully brought out here....nice poem

    • Sabu
      February 8, 2007
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      Thanks for your comments. Sorry i was late in replying as i was busy with exams.

  • mimiagatha
    December 13, 2006

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    your poem carries an universal message, and even though you mention in your comments it is between a he and she, it can be also between the two... parties you mention on your page . yes, there should be always a door and a key to the lock or we’ll never solve our problems. very realistic expression.


  • grannyeri gold member
    December 7, 2006
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    Can understand this better with the author notes - and that is so true. Silence is not golden in this case - nothing gets accomplished, nothing is settled. No one says anything and life becomes almost unbearable at times. Liked the rhythm and rhyme in these lines, sentiments well expressed.