I see it slipping again, fading away,
the dawn of a new day in discorded array.
This bitter cold armour clawing out from the shade,
a shadow of old warnings, reluctant to fade.
The frigid wall of esteem hidden deep within features,
No sane person understands the whims of this creature.
A sanctuary where I belong on its shores,
and in it's embrace I'll again withdraw,
if once again I can gain access,
then this grief shall harmlessly pass.
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Written November 5th, 2006
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Good start...
So I decided to return the favor...
This piece started off quite well. Then it just tailed off in the last 3 lines. It almost seems like you ran out of interesting things to say. Also, the shortened length of the last few lines throw off the established rhythm. I dont know. That's just me.
Also...is "coldness" a word??? -
know where your name comes from now! Good poem, rhymes well and good flow. Wheres the inspiration from? xxxx
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nicely done...great job poet
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