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The Boy I Always Loved

Like a storm, you rolled in...

cleansed my body with your rain

Dark grey clouds fade, tickling my soul

releasing me from my pain


I feel it every time you're near...

hot blood rushes to my face

Searching for years, to no avail

I have finally found my place


Your love demands I forget the past

put aside the hows and whys

Should I get sad, it will be you

that wipes the tears from my eyes


You see right through me, I can't hide

I wouldn't given the chance

You held me close, and soon became

my life's most glorious dance


I am the late fruit of the tree

things have only just begun

Each tender kiss you give sparks

a breath of life...where there was none


You came into my life un-armed

strong delicate hands ungloved

The moment I looked into your eyes, I

saw the boy I always loved!

Author notes

For Clark,,,when I was a little girl and a cheerleader for his football team, I remember those eyes so well. I don't know how we manged to run into each other after all these years, but I am so glad we did! I love you Clark.
Written November 4th, 2006

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  • Distant Traveller
    March 21, 2008
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    BEAUTIFUL! you left me speechless!
    Love,
    Michelle


  • pinkfairyprincess
    November 23, 2007
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    iya >>
    this poem is reli vry vry gd. i had sad music on at the tym wyl reading it and it just bort tears 2 my eyes. i think you have a reli gr8 tallent and you obviously have by all those awards. i hope you keep writting because it keeps me entertained.
    i write poems like this 2 but neva as gd as urs.
    keep it up, u'l put a smile on many faces....


  • Ray Von
    August 21, 2007

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    Sweet!!

    It was very deep and meaningful all the way through, and the end just made it even more meaningful!
    Maria

  • wordwright
    April 3, 2007
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    Excellent

    Wow, shawn!  you were great before...but now....!  al I can say is WOW!


  • 6-Ft-UnDeR
    February 28, 2007
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    this is really good....i love rhyming poetry so this write captivated me....i miss commenting on your poetry. ur such an outstanding writer...i look up to your work and hope one day to i can write lyke you.
    i hope u get the message i sent you. it's been so very long since i've been on this site.


  • Puppydog gold member
    February 23, 2007

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    BEAUTIFULLY WRITTEN FROM THE HEART

    It is wonderful to meet up again with ones who were special to us those many years ago, I am so glad you had the chance to see him again.


  • wave picture frame
    February 17, 2007

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    woah!

    hey! remember me! ha i've not been on this site in like 2 years! but back then you were lovely and read my poetry which was very much appreciated. it's so nice to see you are still writing poetry of such a high expressive caliber i've recently fallen deeply in love with my current girlfriend a few months ago and can really relate to this. i like to imagine her thinking this poem to herself which makes me feel good i love the idea of rain being a beautiful, positive cleansing thing, which is a nice and original perspective as most people see it as a dark, sad thing. it brings life and i love this because i'm from Scotland! haha thankyou for continuing writing. it's a joy to read. peace and love friend. wave picture frame x x x


  • Puppydog gold member
    November 6, 2006
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    OH SO WONDERFUL AND TOUCHING

    Ahhhh, those old flames from school days I wish mine would come back This is a loving and tender poem.


  • KevinDunn
    November 6, 2006
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    A very nice poem. In an odd way I feel it complements my own long poem "Redhead with Phosphorus," but perhaps that is just me being egocentric. But you work is well-written and moving.


  • Smirnoff Ice
    November 5, 2006
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    This is a lovely piece with an excellent flow to it.great to see you writing.Loved it!


  • Shakes-spear
    November 5, 2006
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    Love is so wonderful! This makes me remember how wonderful if feels to be loved by someone you love! This was great, The Shaker


  • TallDrinkofWater
    November 5, 2006
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    Excellent

    Such a lucky Man(Boy) I can feel your admeration for him you loning and your love just pure out in this piece, Well done poet


  • KingdomPrincess
    November 4, 2006
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    great piece

    i like this one a lot. keep it up friend.


  • Death4Hire13
    November 4, 2006
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    Awesome

    I love this. It has great rhythem, and it rhymes. I wish I could find a love like this! Much like in future writings!


  • xXxThat GurlxXx
    November 4, 2006
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    spamwitch~
    Hey! I really enjoyed this poem. It was nicely written, and I know this feeling all to well, except in my case I didn't the guy. Well you know that doesnt mean anything I still have a life ahead of me, maybe I will run into him again. Good luck! Keep on writing, and dont forget to keep on keeping on.
    ~!~Manda~!~


  • the-emo-you-love
    November 4, 2006
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    i love this poem its very good


  • Xpianistpassionx
    November 4, 2006
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    sweet

    wow this is a very beautiful and heartwarming piece. i really loved it. you have a nicwe flow of rhymes and beautiful imagery. i love the last to satnzas of u describing being the late fruit of the tree an dthe last part where you said "The moment i looked in your eyes, I saw the boy i always loved!" wow these two lines are just so beautiful. isnt love so wonderful? Love is something that falls out from the sky like the rain cursing everyone with a precious beautiful word called love. i just love reading love poetry and you my friend have a great piece here. it was a pleasure reading it and so much emotions. well as fa as i am concerned you two should be happy that you are together. Nothing is better than two hearts combining making a one big whole. AS for me i'll stop here and say one last thing. You are a great poet and i would love to read more of your work. It was a superb write.

    with love Liana


  • Dalaney gold member
    November 4, 2006
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    This is simply precious work.
    I knew I would like it the
    minute I saw the title, and
    you did not disappoint. This
    has a very innocent sound to
    it, and the last stanza is
    perfection...I give this a
    standing O
    Love,
    Lane


  • Senior09
    November 4, 2006
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    Wow, this was beautiful, just wow. Unbelievable. This was just wow, there isn't even a word to describe how wonderfully put together this poem is. But when I read it, it felt like I was reading from the my soul. I feel this everytime I'm talking with my true love. Well put, you have great talent.

    Autumn


  • danceswithdaisys
    November 4, 2006
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    like it.

    Very nice. I like this a lot! I like your rhymes a lot. It sounds very natural. I also like the picture that goes with it.


  • whitewings
    November 4, 2006
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    One fantastic read

    OMG what a fantastic read sheer poetry in motion. This has to be one of the best I have had the pleasure of reading. You should be so proud of this write... I scream out to you WELL DONE and thank you so much.

  • Lisa Haslett
    November 4, 2006
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    Great poem

    Good Poem I liked it!Keep on going there!Lisa K Haslett raytown Missouri!Great work,You got it going on!


  • masterblaster gold member
    November 4, 2006
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    Hi, sounds like the perfect soul mate for you, and I am happy for you, nice to read a romantic poem of love, there is too much gloom and doom around, nice write, all the best, Di


  • Patience15
    November 4, 2006
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    Ohhh this was so sweet. I felt this same way for my guy. This was so beautiful. Great Job.


  • Bullet To The Head
    November 4, 2006
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    nice write!
    "You see right through me, I can't hide

    I wouldn't given the chance

    You held me close, and soon became

    my life's most glorious dance"

    liked that stanza!

    great rhyming and flow, this poem was lovely and beautiful.
    thanks for sharing this!
    keep writing!
    ♥ lynn


  • desperatelyobvious
    November 4, 2006
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    this is an outstanding write. the first line "like a storm, you rolled in" is the type of line that grabs the reader and says, 'i have more to say so stay and listen', and i love that. just reading it makes me wish i had that with some one else. but i am happy for you and the boy you love, i hope all remains well.

    kudos on the beautiful write.
    -kay


  • JamieG
    November 4, 2006
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    Great

    That really is beutiful, and I am so glad you finannaly "found" each other... bless you and may you be happy and in love for always


  • bluejeans51
    November 4, 2006
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    This is a beautiful poem you've written. Excellent flow and choice of words.


  • individuality gold member
    November 4, 2006
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    a breath of life.. - just missed a dot off here with the ellipses a good poem, it has a nice steady pace, leading the reading down warmly. spill ink and twist me into the crazy shape of love...

    Edited on Nov 04, 2:54 p.m. because 'typo'.


  • b e a u t i f u l
    November 4, 2006
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    this was beautiful. i hope everything works out for you guys! good luck
    ~*april*~


  • Blooming Poet
    November 4, 2006
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    Great

    I feel the same way about my boy. Great poem.

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