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Budapest





Heels clicked unhurriedly               
    across winter white marble floor               
patterned with swirls of curls               
    of flattering fawn                
echoes of Liszt haunted the air               
as I recalled sultry nights               
in the Grand Hotel Royal on the               
Pest side of the Danube               
   
I stepped into the elevator               
huge doors swept together               
an easy semi-silent swoosh               
and I leaned against mirror walls               
gawped and flushed blush               
she smiled she knew               
her charcoal eyes               
smouldering passion               
lips slightly parted               
glistening glace cherries lush               

I felt my nipples               
harden               
my breasts               
tender plump               
  and I wondered how                
her tongue would feel               
drifting my navel and               
easing apart my virgin quimm               
already swollen like               
quenelles of               
lilac blossom sorbet              
             
Purist moist surpassed               
as a flourish of fluids               
came in waves               
at the mere thought               
of my initiation               
into fabulosexual de feminine               
                  



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Written November 4th, 2006

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  • exoticbeaches
    May 1, 2007

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    POETIC,Ravishing, sensual, a rainbow of fireworks explode as i felt every inch of this poem titilate my body. WELL DONE. Patti


  • Trixie08
    April 18, 2007

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    WOW! This one was made me breathless. Thank you for such a brillant write and Best of luck in the contest.


  • Floorboards
    March 13, 2007
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    brilliant, thanks for entering!

  • The tie guy
    March 4, 2007
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    Love the lesbian love! Thanks for entering!
    The Tie Gu


  • XXBrunettexBarbieXX
    January 14, 2007
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    woah! This was a very very hot write..i couldnt take my eyes off the screen if i tried...i was so into this poem..it was so pasionate and just breath taking. i love the words you used and the flow was so smooth..keepw rititng you are great at it!


  • storiesuntold gold member
    December 22, 2006

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    You have done a great piece here for those who feels love what ever way they can get it . very moving


  • Heavenly Angel silver member
    December 22, 2006
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    Excellent! I wish you all the best in the contest!

  • socialpoet
    December 22, 2006
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    I can almost smell and taste this scene...makes me want to do a threesome.


  • light insight silver member
    December 22, 2006
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    Sexy

    You never cease to amaze me with the clean yet erotic picture you create. It's hard (no pun intended) to provide such arousing words without tainting the art with trash. You do this as well as anyone one this site! Great write.

  • Yvette Champ gold member
    December 22, 2006

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    "quenelles of lilac blossom sorbet" is an exquisite phrase,this is sensual,tasteful,well written and explicit without being too graphic,it invites the reader along on the journey of the fantasy and is dressed in the finest feminine overcoat of inked creativity,well done and good luck in this contest,love and light,Yvette


  • lovelustre
    December 22, 2006
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    soft and sensually delighting this piece floats on the feminine essence...


  • individuality gold member
    December 22, 2006
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    hold the lift please, i am going down. phew, i thought i would have to walk all the way then


  • Ninth-Poet
    December 9, 2006

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    beautifully written!

    It is quite a different piece from what I've read so far as you've entered a poem that invoke sexual emotions. This very descriptive piece of literature gave me a small feeling of yearning.

    -What was the inspiration to your piece?

    -Keep the ink flowing!
    -and good luck in the contest!

    -Solus McKnight


  • individuality gold member
    November 18, 2006

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    ohh i just used the word swoosh in my new poem thought i would come and revisit you in this here poem and wave a sensual ripple of hello there, going down ma'am? watches as the lift moves spill ink and twist me into the crazy shape of love...


  • NeanderthalMan
    November 13, 2006
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    Tres Bon

    Seductively written, and beautiful visualizations..and yeah wowzers..


  • pyewacket
    November 5, 2006
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    This is beautiful and sensual, that exciting feeling of wonder and lust!! A great write, and I particularly liked it having been to Budapest, I could picture a little more. Well done, it has great use of words and certainly left me feeling wanton...


  • Silent Cougar Moderators member
    November 5, 2006
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    oh!! to be a bell-boy, what an image you created here. steaming hot write my friend. well done.

  • White Dove
    November 5, 2006
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    Superb

    A brilliant eroctic piece you have penned. A sensual write full of heat and intensity. This is the first time I have read any poetry that has been on the right side of the page, initially it made me feel a little sea sick. Thank you for sharing your talent which shines from the page. God Bless.


  • JeannieD Hunter gold member
    November 5, 2006
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    This is fricking amazing!! Very hot and sizzling write. Steaming hot it is. Good luck in the contest.

    Jeannie


  • Apsinthion
    November 5, 2006
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    jaw-dropping!

    i dt think my comment will do this piece any justice.. so i'm just gna say that it's the most amazing sexual sensual piece i'v read so far.. i applaud now

    ~rana~

  • afireinthisheart
    November 5, 2006
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    awesomely seductive

    very sensual and visual...for the flow of love is there so seductively and inviting...awesome write...smile...hugs and love...David


  • Swtpoetryman
    November 5, 2006
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    LIFED ME SPIRITS UP AND MORE!

    As promised I'm back for another read of this stimulating and beautiful piece which was even better the second time around. It didn't let me

    d
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    that's for sure, Sweet Sara Jane!

    Peace & Love!
    Earl.


  • Floorboards
    November 5, 2006
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    wow! this is really something jan, 'tis a beautifully written piece,
    superb my friend,
    alex


  • Lionslove silver member
    November 5, 2006
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    incredible!!

    ....WOWZERS!!!.... ....awesome, sara!!!!

    you're more than skilled enough to know all the poetic device and techniques used here, so i'm not going to repeat them back to you...just....thankyou. wonderfully done..as usual!!

    all the best................................Lionslove


  • MotorcycleFreak silver member
    November 4, 2006
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    Bravo!

    What an excellent bit of fantasy you have penned here my friend. The imagery is a delicious as the seductive voice that you would imagine coming from the object of desire in this particular poem. Very well done my fellow poet. ~PeacE~GarY~


  • PassionsPromise gold member
    November 4, 2006
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    wonderfulpiece

    this was a wonderfully penned piece. i too had to check out what inspired this peice. Well done. great imagination, and great word play. wonderful indeed i too have to, must applaud this. best of luck to you.
    VSutton

  • Uriah Hamilton
    November 4, 2006
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    Sexy amazing!! A dream lost in eternity!


  • Swtpoetryman
    November 4, 2006
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    What a beautiful picture you painted!

    Now I'll have sweet dreams tonight for sure of a younger you with a female lover! AHHHHHHHH - how sweet you must have tasted then - still I bet that you are even sweeter now like a fine wine which gets sweeter and smoother with the passing of the years! GOOD LUCK in the contest, Sweet Sara Jane! Sadly I am all out of applause for today but I'll be back tomorrow for another read (which I know will make me harder the second time around) and to leave you The Standing O that this sweet and sesual piece deserves. Thanks SO MUCH for featuring this piece for sadly i would have missed it and my dreams this evening and on Sunday morning wouldn't be nearly as sweet!
    Peace & Love!
    Earl.


  • Edna Sweetlove
    November 4, 2006
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    I shall have to applaud this as it is very nicely written. I have only had it off once in Budapest. It was in a single bed in the Gellert Hotel and we practically broke the bedsprings.


  • November 4, 2006
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    Excellent

    Jan, this is a very passionate and very well written Poem . Keep up the fantastic work and best of luck to you in the contest.

    Cheers
    Terry


  • dutch2lips gold member
    November 4, 2006
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    SJ, I just love the way you can build up this sexual feeling by your words, almost feeling the vibe, the heat. Great work mah dear, thank you for entering and goodluck in my contest!


  • individuality gold member
    November 4, 2006
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    i think i just swooshed then, i had better get changed a wonderful piece here, you set the scene in the mind with ease. deliciously. i wish that you have good luck in this contest you have entered. spill ink and twist me into the crazy shape of love...


  • leo2
    November 4, 2006
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    I had to take a peek at what inspired this piece. I must say you've done a marvelous job of interpreting the photo. It's interest to see it through the eyes of another woman. Good luck in the contest.

    Sincerely,
    Leo Long

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