Ladies and gentlemen, witness the hero
Number one girl whose life is subzero,
Eye up the sweetest lovely goddess
Who gives salvation and nothing less.
Give her the awe that she deserves
Release the applause you all reserve
Because you do not understand
The respect of her that I demand,
All the curtsies and all the bows
That you encased within your vows
To be diplomatic to be truthful yet,
All your promises are never met.
B,
You are the first explosion from a bite
You are the suffering standing, for the right
You are the warmth of a tequila shot
You are the beauty, stars never got
You are the sharpness to every blade
You are the fortune, no one ever made
You are the glint in every lover’s eye
You are the answer to every why
You are the fire, humanity discovered
You are the secrets, none have uncovered
Children and OAP’s, see the first wonder
Of the world. That desire will plunder
When stepping into our world for one
Reason, whiles you believe the con
Desire tries to steal, this woman I crave
But I fight back with my rage wave
In order to restrain desires want
I consume it with my entire detente.
I WANT THIS GIRL, I NEED HER SO
That I will never ever, forever let her go
SHE IS MY WORLD, never take her from me
Because she’s my soul mate and we will marry
B,
You’re the incandescence of desire
You’re the rhythm to God’s choir
You’re the air that I need to live
You’re the life ‘our God’ did give
You’re the fire within my subzero chest
You’re the power that strives for my best
You’re the enthusiasm that frees me
You’re the power that shouts “marry me!”
You’re the burning liquor that I ingest
You’re the exculpation that fills my soul
You’re the wisdom that returns my control
Animals and auras, understand this
I WANT, I NEED, I LIVE FOR HER KISS
My need for her is far more than air
Miles, states, you are SO unfair
No words can ever come even close
To this feeling within, I’ve never chose
I’d murder, cook and eat my family
If it meant that we could be
I’d devour my career for you
My gorgeous Snookams, my beautiful B
Your fingers I’d take to my hands like lace
And those erotic lips, I’d suck off your face
“I want to carve your name into my chest
Want to (make) love you before I rest
I need you so much more than I
Have ever felt for anyone, I’d rather die
Than let you be in pain or in eloquent tears.
I tell you this
In total, entire truth
You ARE my hero and the blanket to my fears”
Author notes
I wrote this for the love of my life, my soul mate. Yes you may claim at my young age that I would not know a thing of love. But still, this is how I feel.
Written November 3rd, 2006
A contest entry
- Unexpected happiness by KevinDunn.
300 points, ended November 10, 2006, 17 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - All You Need Is Love by xSweetDreamsx.
800 points, ended August 31, 2007, 53 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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i love it. this contest is titled all you need is love, you've got everything that you need and well bloody done! fantatic poem i love it!
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This is a fantastic write! I was drawn in from the first few lines, and descriptions are perfect! Brilliant!
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ur so dam sweet. i am sitting here look though ur poems and i thought i commented u on this. but i told u how i felt i hope.but all ur poems are azaming and u r 2. i wish we could spend time together and see each other and be who we are. One day i fly out and see you. when i turn 18. and that be the best summer in my life spendin time with u. u understand and everythign and thank u so mych more listing. ur the best.
Brycen (Bryt)
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Wow, this is mesmerizing. The hyperboles are crafted uniquely, it is a refreshing piece from the cliche love poems. I especially adore the opening:
Number one girl whose life is subzero,
Eye up the sweetest lovely goddess
It presents her as a Goddess-esque, celestial figure on a stage, but as the poem progresses, there goes a paradoxical, yet lovely sequence pouring the essences of love.
Although I hate to criticize, I would just like to point out that you may want to beautify the '..erotic lips,.. suck it off your face.' It just seems a bit unfitting with the overall elegance. Good luck in the contest! -
Good
This is so incredibly beautiful. Issues like theses tend to be stuffed under the rug and people tend to get sickened almost by homosexuality. Thank you for putting it out in the open!
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