“Roses are red,
Violets are blue”
With these words I wanted to start the writing of a poem for you, to show you what I’m feeling,
but then I realized, that nobody could express what I feel just by writing a few lyrics in a piece of paper.
No… This that I feel goes beyond the language and the written understanding.
There are just no words to describe it, nor metaphors to compare it with.
This that I feel doesn’t need to be known, to be immortalized,
Because what longs in my heart has nothing to do with violets and roses, it has nothing to do with ink and paper.
Its love, but it’s not just that, and naming it would only leave it incomplete.
“Roses are red,
Violets are blue”
This is how I wanted to finish your poem, but then I realized,
Poems end, what I feel doesn’t.
Author notes
I made a poem about the -poems cliche-. This often used verse (the title) is turned into something not so cliche
Written November 3rd, 2006
Supercalifragilisticexpialidocious
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Oh wow, simple and sweet. I love the last line the best.
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This was great. I never really thought of it this way but this poem really is the truth. Deep feelings for somethings are not words, paper or ink and it does not end. Well done for totally opening my mind to this way of thinking. Sounds funny i know but it really got me thinking. Thanks.
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Im glad you liked it
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Awww i liked this it was really origional and i liked the ending, the final line. 'Poems will end, but my feelings wont'
I really liked that line it was beautiful.
Thanks for entering.
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roses are red, violets are blue, someone just wrote their love for you.
wow. what an amazing piece of work. i'm not much of a fan of the form you used, but i have to hand it to you...you did an excellent job with it. the conclusion you ended with was so beautiful...poems end, but what i feel doesn't. you blow my mind away!
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So glad all of you liked it n_n
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AWWW!!!
This is so cute! I love how you took a familiar verse and turned it into something completely different. very creative and original. Great write! -
so true
you're so right there's no way to express the true meaning of love in words.. and love should never end like a poem does....
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