The heart that loves must also grieve.
Remember that when he falls to his knees,
The chant, the chase, embrace then part,
A dance to the beat, drummed by my heart.
By mine own hand, down went the veil,
Shock of divine life, indeed so frail.
Lowered the shroud, upon his head,
And cried out loud, the King is dead!
But as with Gods, and so on Earth,
There comes no death, without rebirth.
So lift the veil he so despised,
Take his hands, Let the Holly King rise!
Author notes
Hey, I hope the erm... Holly King doesn't mind me putting this up, Its from Lunasadh but I only found it tonight.
Written August 2nd, 2006
Umm Its kind of a self sacrifice poem as well as a rebirth one, but what the hey, its a story of death and rebirth. I lkike the way it marks the similarities between the old celtic religions and the major world religiomns. ie, sacrifice for ones own people and returning.
anyway, sorry its bit dark for the time of year. Nice idea for a competition by the way,
Best
MB
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awesome poem! Thanks for entering, this is very neat and well written. It's perfect for this time of year as well.
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Lots of power, good delivery of the rhyme an message, has a mystical old world quality, melding of ideas, that is what brought us here. Thanks for the entry.
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what is with falling on knees that makes me feel like this?!?!?! sorry just my little expresion of feelings... i liked it a lot... really good - loved the flow of it, adn the power of it... xxx
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Wow. This is fa-mazing. I used to be Wiccan, but I don't consider myself one anymore. Although, I still practice a lot of the tenats and celebrate the Sabbats. This is a great write and I love the way you rhymed. You got an amazing way to tell the story behind Lughnasadh.
Blessings, Skye.
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Hi, thanks for the really great comment! I was wondering, why don't you consider yourself wiccan, if you still practise the sabbats, sorry, if I sound nosy, I was just curious
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wow...you can literally see the action happening around you..jesus thats amazing maria, really sucked me in..good work! wow!
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I love this. It flows etherically perfect from line to line, almost like a dance itself! I don't think there is a rhyme scheme but there is a sense of a harmony between the lines. It's also a perfet length! Well Done!
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