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God's Garden

Where are you going
Can I come too
Is it far to go
Why's the sky so blue
When we get there, will we rest
Can we smell the rain
Will we feel angels' breath
Where are you going
Do you even know
Is this God's Garden
The Seed he's sown
Did he make this path
Did he know we'd come
Did he lift the dawn
Did he lift the Son
Where are you going
Can I come too
In God's Garden can I be with you?

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Written November 2nd, 2006

A contest entry

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  • Kaleidoscopeyes
    June 28, 2007
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    Very beautiful and very cute! I really like this! Good luck in the contest!


  • Angels Delight
    June 6, 2007
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    WOW

    My Dear Poet

    First of all can I say thank you for entering this beautiful poem into my contest...It was written so wonderfully and grabbed me at the heart strings from the first line

    I want to wish you the best of luck in the contest

    Much Love
    Tessa


  • A to the Rron
    November 14, 2006
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    Simply Amazing, I guess Gods smiling on me tonight, I've found a great many poems that have blown me away, this being one of them. I loved this, it flowed so well, You created a master peice for sure. Great Job, and Good Luck in life.

  • Susan E. Pennycuff
    November 3, 2006
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    This was such a touching piece, I have to admit however that I found the question marks at the end of every line distracting, but even having said that, the piece was a great write. I enjoyed this one very much.
    good luck in the contest
    Hugs,
    Suzi


  • individuality gold member
    November 3, 2006
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    Gods Garden - God's Garden as the garden is belonging to god. a good poem i wish that you have good luck in this contest you have entered. spill ink and twist me into the crazy shape of love...

    Edited on Nov 03, 12:16 because 'forgot a d lol'.


  • B Chandler
    November 2, 2006
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    The high marks that grabbed me the most was that you started out in first person then went into second, then third person point of view. I'm not sure if anyoue will catch as quickly as I have but in the end the simplicity within those questions are very evident. Keep penning

    Rae


  • princesspeach
    November 2, 2006
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    that was soooo beautiful.
    good luck. ><

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