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A Moment With My Father

Through all the tears of sorrow
finally there is some peace
with mom back to work and my sister back at shool
I chose to spend this day with my father
whom now feels lost with his only brother gone
and as I sit here,pen in hand I watch my father sleeping
I have to wonder if he is dreaming and what is going through his mind
there is so much sorrow surrounding our family
but the impact on him has played the biggest part
and as I gaze at my father,such a handsome man is he
should I ever fall in love
my father would be the example of who I would want it to be
a good provider and a good teacher
honorable and kind,my hero
and a blessed man who believes in God
and with his every hug I know I am forever protected
but most of all his eyes tell me I am loved
yes he is my father and I am blessed to have him as mine
and as I look at him again I can see
he is really not sleeping yet silence is in the air
and I am sure I see a tear
so I take a tissue in my hand and I gently rub his cheek
and I put my arms around him
saying"Its ok daddy I am here"
and he whispers back"I know angel and I will never feel alone as long as you are near".
This moment with my father will be printed very clear
and locked into my memory box for forever and all years.


Author notes

Five days have passed since my Uncle Wayne passed away and it is a day I just wanted to be with my father alone.
HALEIGH
Written November 2nd, 2006

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  • Misty Melody gold member
    July 11, 2008

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    This is a wonderful write. I enjoyed -- thanks for entering my contest and good luck. Thanks, Melody


  • Fulabeans
    February 4, 2008
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    Beautiful

    I am truly touched by this piece.... such a loving bond between a father and his child is a rare thing in this day and age. I can tell that you are very proud of your Father, as am I of mine. I especially liked the ending.

    well done and thanks for your entry


  • Amunet Wolfbane Moderators member
    January 9, 2008
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    I agree this is beautiful. It actually gave me chills as I read it. Bravo and good luck to you.


  • Swangrnv gold member
    December 15, 2007
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    BEAUTIFUL

    THAT'S ALL I CAN SAY


  • loveyourfate
    December 15, 2007

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    Well this is the kind of kind of thing I was looking for, thanks for your entry. It's a lovely piece, a beautiful poem. I wondered where you were going to go with this, but the end made it all clear and you painted that last part nicely.


  • bigXfatXemo
    April 17, 2007
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    Aww!

    This was so sweet, I love how you have so much admiration for your dad. I'm really sorry to hear of your loss, but I think it's wonderful you're there for each other in this difficult time. All the very best to you, and thankyou for entering. Good luck!
    Frankie xXx


  • Tercil gold member
    March 3, 2007

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    Sentimental suave

    There seems a lot of spiritual involvement in this piece. Much of this seems like an effigy this icon, you wish to partake, lovely sentimentality.

  • trace3grls
    November 2, 2006
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    this so great writing can help with pain....


  • Lonely-raven18
    November 2, 2006
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    it is perfected ...cuz i cried lol

    aww man u seroiusly made me cry
    i'm still crying
    i love my dad so much thats why i cried
    awww this poem is so flipping nice
    i wanna keep it lol
    or i'll just hang it up on my wall ...i love it
    ok i stop crying man lol
    good writing and awsome work


  • SEA angel gold member
    November 2, 2006
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    God Bless Haleigh and her family

    Often through sorrow comes inspiration sent on angel wings. What a lovely father/daughter love you and your father share. God Bless you both and your family at this time of grief and tears.

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