These Eyes Do Not Lie
Look deep within, what do I see,
like a gem, many facets shine.
Some distorted, who should I be,
are all of these things truly mine?
Sadness stares, among my tears,
it is staring me right in the eye.
Part of my life for many years,
was love always making me cry.
I see laughter and a big smile,
from children who blessed my life.
Kept smiling, yet all the while
it hid many sorrows and strife.
Entwined throughout, it's love I see,
broken hearts and promises strewn.
Those fairytale endings for me,
lay shattered and broken in ruin.
Looking close I see signs of hope,
sometimes dashed, yet I still dream.
Keeping hope alive helps me cope,
things are not as bad as they seem.
Author notes
Written November 2nd, 2006
In a list
A contest entry
- Look Into Their Eyes...Tell Me What You See by Rose Dark Thorn.
550 points, ended December 11, 2006, 15 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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beautiful. reflective. seeking. contented. these are the words that came to mind as i was reading your poem. you did a great job on this. keep on writing. God bless you
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excellent
Very beautiful write, I agree with debilynn God sure did bless you with a wonderful talent and a big heart. Thanks for sharing both. -
LOVELY COMMENT !!!!!!!
Hi debilynn. I thank you so much for your wonderful comment. It made me smile. I am glad you enjoyed reading it. I appreciate you taking the time to read my poem. So nice to hear from you. Take care, Sandy
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most very excellent write!!!!!
BEAUTIFUL, BEAUTIFUL WRITE! i LOVE THIS POEM! SO MUCH IS SOUGHT WITH THE EYES AND CAN BE SEEN IN THE EYES AND SOMETIMES EMOTIONS ARE HARD TO PUT TO WORDS BUT LADY, YOU'VE DONE AN EXCELLENT JOB HERE! YOU ARE SO TALENTED....I THINK MY EYES JUST TURNED GREEN! GOD HAS TRULY BLESSED YOU WITH THIS TALENT, KEEP IT UP! -
What else could I say about this poem you have written here? This poem was written so well and nicely put. Keep up the good work and never stop penning.
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I liked this. You really put a lot of thought into it, and I think it's a great depiction. Thanks so much for entering the contest, and good luck.
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A TRULY BEAUTIFUL AND SINCERE POEM
There is so much in ones eyes, all of their feelings and thoughts can be seen there.
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Bravo Sandy. This one really is a grandslam. I feel like i can relate to this in so many different ways. It's incredible good!!!!
Michelle
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Well written poem. You captured and aptly described many of the possibilities that these eyes could be reflecting. I liked the fact that your write encompassed the good and the bad for an overall picture of what could lie behind these eyes. Well done sis! James
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Very nice write!!! Your emotions and pathos were coveyed wonderfully!!! I really enjoyed the depressing and despearingness of it, but at the same time glimpses of hope...excellent write!!!
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Very Good
VERY GOOD WRITE! I loved every bit of it, except "Sadness stares, among my tears,", gotta say thats a little cliche, sorry. Other then that a very well written piece! Keep up the good work!
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I am glad you spoke of hope even after shattered dreams. I enjoyed this piece very much. Good job Dear.
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Smoosh...Flit...Flutter and Whoosh away...FaeryPixieFey -
Sandy, I could see a little of my life in your poem. Especially the joy that your children brought, even though your heart was in distraught. this is another touching write by you!
Oh by the by, in case you didn't know...I am formery MMISS
Changed my author name lol. Good luck in this contest my friend.GBY
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Wow, I can really relate to this write. I can hardly pick a favorite line. It's all so good! I guess one of my favs is "Those fairytale endings for me,
lay shattered and broken in ruin." ...that's AWESOME! Great write. I'm gonna book mark this one! -
What do they say - the eyes are the portals to the soul? So much seen in the eyes of this person. You have written about all these things - easy to read and understand.
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Well, you have written a pretty little reflective rhyming poem expressing homespun philosophy. Eyes, indeed, are windows to the soul. May this poem smile its eyes into the judges eyes! Ron.
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