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Puppy Listen



sorry buddy, I'm not in the mood
I am confused as the grass is bent
a puppy heart like you would never understand

dad's heart of stone like the wall that's there
wouldn't care or understand
he didn't even try

mom's in there, trying to reason him out
dad sticks to his harshness...
I don't know what to do

we'll play for sure. but make it tomorrow
I just need to calm things down in my mind
buddy... thanks for listening to me


Author notes

By RIP Whoever. turned 12



Contest/Picture: allpoetry.com/contest/2309516



Written November 1st, 2006

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  • Namita
    July 9, 2007

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    This is a very nice poem. Good work. Keep it yupp~~!! Best of luck in the contest!! Do well. *God Bless you*

    Luv,
    Candy
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  • RIP Whoever
    November 7, 2006
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    thanks so much


  • Tam
    November 7, 2006
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    Great Job

    Oh my goodness! What a great job you did with this write!!!
    I am very impressed with your talent.
    Very well done.
    Congrats on your HM also! I can't wait to read more from you in the near future!
    Blessings! Tammy


  • mysticstorm gold member
    November 1, 2006
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    What a wonderfully sad write for the picture. The stress children go through due to us adults. if we only knew would we change it? I would hope to think so.
    Great job.
    Thank you for entering!