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Can't You Hear The Whispers?

Can’t you hear the whispers?
They’re ringing through my head
Can’t you hear the whispers?
I will until I’m dead

Can’t you hear the whispers?
They’re making me crazy
Can’t you hear the whispers?
My world is kind of hazy

Can’t you hear the whispers?
I can’t believe you can’t, I sure do
Can’t you hear the whispers?
They’re telling me I love you

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Written November 1st, 2006

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  • Angel With No Halo
    June 5, 2007

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    I like this. Your end rhyme is good.. there is only one spot here I would change.. that kind of misses the flow a little...

    "Can’t you hear the whispers?
    They’re making me crazy
    Can’t you hear the whispers?
    My world is kind of hazy"

    My suggestion here would be to add a word after "me" and before "crazy". The word "go" might be a good one.. simple but yet it will fix the flow of the stanza and thus not take away from the poem.

    I like the repitition here too. Great wording.

    ~Krys~