Written in the rain
Are secrets yet to be told
Written in the rain
Are truths that are centuries old
Written in the rain
Are awful deaths and joyous births
Written in the rain
Are the stories of the earth
But what exactly is written in the rain?
We will never know for sure
Perhaps the joys some have felt
Or the pain others have endured
Maybe songs of lament
Or poems of celebration
Perhaps conquering armies
Or the births of mighty nations
Written in the rain
Are secrets yet to be told
Written in the rain
Are truths that are centuries old
Written in the rain
Are awful deaths and joyous births
Written in the rain
Are the stories of the earth
But what all is written in the rain?
Maybe that wisdom's not fit for humankind
Or maybe it's a treasure
Which we must seek until we find
And if we ever do find it
What will we do then?
Will we exploit the information
To help ourselves and our close friends?
Or will we share it with everyone
So we can all finally be the same?
Or should we hide the knowledge
Until we can face the shame?
Written in the rain
Are secrets yet to be told
Written in the rain
Are truths that are centuries old
Written in the rain
Are awful deaths and joyous births
Written in the rain
Are the stories of the earth
Some actions people did
Are really terribly bad
And if we all know each others' secrets
Everyone will be mad
But if we can see like our comrades
From a different point of view
Does that mean we can have peace at last
And things could start anew?
Written in the rain
Are secrets yet to be told
Written in the rain
Are truths that are centuries old
Written in the rain
Are awful deaths and joyous births
Written in the rain
Are the stories of the earth
Author notes
I just love the chorous, but I'm not so sure about the rest of it. Does it do the chorous justice?
Written November 1st, 2006
In a list
A contest entry
- Write a Song! by Natelystious.
450 points, ended May 10, 2007, 20 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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THANKS!!
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O wow Kerry this is like one of your best, definetly. I UBER like this one a whole UBER lot because it is SUPERCOOOOO.
But seriously, as Mango said, it is very deep and has a very good message.
I WANT YOUR MUSE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!1
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Katey ~
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THANK YOU!!
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omg kerry this is awesome! probably your deepest write, in my opinion at least. the chorus is frickin amazing and the rest ties in very nicely as well. some of the lines really popped out at me with their insight and depth. you picked a fantastic theme that I've never actually read before, so that was just amazing as well. this really inspiring and I ♥ it TO DEATH!!! seriously Kerry, you blow me away
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maybe, if you take out some of the 'Or's because that gets a bit repetitive and put a comma on the line before instead, it'll have a slightly more dramatic effect i.e.
Maybe songs of lament,
poems of celebration
in the conquering armies,
and births of mighty nations
then it kind of ties it a bit more to the conflicting ideas of the joys and the pain... i don't know, it's your poem... -
Thank you!
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i like it. it has the whole world mystery will we ever understand it thing going on, and that totally works for me, i'll read through it again and check it all out for you
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