Writing has been Roni Lynn's life
I started even before becoming a teen,
For my mouth couldn't form the words
But on paper the words looked so sharp and keen
It's the only thing I do best in my life
Sure can't fathom one day without it,
No pencil, pen, paper or rhyming
Well I seriously and surely doubt it
Cuz if you take away my poetic utensils
This poetess will come unglued at the seams,
No one can take my writing passion away
For poetry is my hopes and my dreams
I write as fast as I think it
For me it has forever been that way,
My family,my friends, whatever comes to mind
I will rhyme a write for them any ole day
So why I write is not complicated
Read some of my pieces, they all show it,
For again, writing is my whole life
That's how I became POETDONTKNOWIT.
Author notes
THIS IS HOW I BECAME A POET. WRITTEN 6-14-2006
Written November 1st, 2006
poetdontknowit
A contest entry
- Why? by DancingRed.
300 points, ended January 26, 2007, 23 entries
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Comments
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i write to utilise my thoughts,, just to remember yesterday sometimes. well done dear poet x
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This is a great write. It really shows your heart and how much you really do love poetry, which is great! Thanks for sharing this and good luck in my contest!
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you can tell your a poet at heart. there's no doubt about that =]
i loved tis piece. its very creative. thank you for entering my contest
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This was a difficult contest to judge, as there were so many great entries. I loved your poem because of the creativity used. You were in the running for third place, it was actually a tie, however due to only having 1st-3rd place I had to choose
And, unfortunately, it was overtaken by some other poems that I thought to be more polished.
I would still like to honor your poem, because I feel that you are incredibly talented. As were the other contestants that did not place 1st-3rd. I would like to give you another honor, if you will accept it. At the moment, I do not know who you are, until I finish judging the contest here in a few minutes.
Could you please email me sometime today so that I can fill you in on the honor I feel you should have?
katinawoodruff740@yahoo.com.
Thank you so much for entering this contest. I hope that you will get an entire book of poems published; you have many skills.
--Katina
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A Good Work in Progress!
I like how the poem starts out, it begins in the third person point of view. However, the following sentence confused me; it is in a different POV. That is easily fixed and depends on what you were going for in the poem.
Writing has been Roni Lynn's life
I started even before becoming a teen,
For my mouth couldn't form the words
But on paper the words looked so sharp and keen
I write as fast as I think it
For me it has forever been that way,
My family, my friends, whatever comes to mind
I will rhyme a write for them any ole day
Like this third stanza, especially the "any ole day" nice job here!
Here are the areas I feel you may need to consider when you go to revise this piece.
It is a little wordy in the first stanza. This is so common in a first draft.
The cuz may not be needed.
You have a good start with this poem, it takes on the tone of "why you enjoy writing poetry" however, my theme has more to do with the sentence that you were suppose to incorporate into the poem. Check out the contest page for the one requirement.
I am giving everyone a chance to revise his or her poems. I am looking for well-written sentences, no confusing to point of view or wordiness, like in the "cuz" part, and maybe using more emotion to drive the poem. ?
Just need a little more. You may delete this from the contest, revise, and resubmit if you want to edit. Everyone has this option. You will not loose your place I promise.
The reason I am allowing this is because I have a treat for all contestants, but I cannot give this special treat for poems entered that have many errors. Okay.
Any questions just let me know, okay. katinawoodruff740@yahoo.com
Thank you for submitting to this contest. A way to get an in-depth critique and a chance to win a prize!
I really enjoyed this entry. --All the best to you, in all that you do.
Katina Woodruff
Please visit my site when it opens!
TBA, Soon.
www.onestopwriteshop.com
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Strong thoughts here. The third stanza is my favourite - the imagery is stunning, particularly the line "this poetess will come unglued at the seams."
I'm not sure about the 'Cuz' you used - the full word, or perhaps the word " 'cause" would have worked better (with an apostophe to show it's an abbreviation).
I think you've accidently left out a space in the third line of the fourth stanza - just after the first comma. And I think there's an extra space in the first line of the last stanza.
Thanks for entering!
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THANX SO VERY MUCH FOR THE KIND REVIEW! I DEEPLY APPRECIATE IT!
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Hehe, I like this it's fun and witty well done =D
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