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You Think You Know Me!

Missing image

A room

         ~a needle

                        ~pills

                                ~a spoon

fire and smoke

warm acid veins

blood crystallizes.


You think you know me

           ~ the junkie

                           ~ the user     

                                     ~your nightmares come true.

You think I do it for fun

I don't, I do it to hide

              ~ from me

                          ~ from you.


Fears turn to calm lust

lost in it's hopeless love

no more love for oneself

love of the rush

              ~feeling of nothing

                             ~totally numb.  


moments pass

                ~young turns to old.

 

Pretty no longer a word used

for beauty faded as the drugs took hold

regrets creep in, the body ages

                     ~stomach turns             

                                         ~vomit hits the floor.

                                                   

Tears in glitter mascara flow

reminders of mistakes made too often
regrets of too many needles and pills

help to not be found 

                   ~time passed too soon.


Lying waste in addictions

depression sets in

fiend no more as cries of anguish over come

for this beautifully tragedy

                                   ~was the death of youth.









                                                   

Author notes

The subject matter is still the same. For anyone who has been there or who has a loved one that has, you should understand.

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1 - 95 of 95

  • raggyann
    October 28

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    ya thats how it is and you wrote it well
    sad life to the lost ones
    and we pray for their recovery


  • whiterabbit.
    October 1

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    I remember reading this a while back. It's a wonderful write and the reality of the emotions is amazing. I like how strong and raw this whole piece is. There's so much power throughout this and it's an amazing depiction of addiction.


  • lunarlunacy
    December 1, 2008

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    love of the rush

    ~feeling of nothing

    ~totally numb.


    so true so true. love it K. a very raw and blunt truth about the poisons some of us foolish souls have abused our bodies with to anestacize our minds and/or hearts. May the expungement of words help salve what the junk could not.
    blessed be in wyrld tongue,
    A.


  • LOVELYmurder
    November 22, 2008

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    Amazing. I love how you layed out the poem it really added to the message. I love the perspective you gave on this, it shows the mind of an addict. The begining was great, flawless. No spelling or grammar errors, which is great, I'm a very big stickler on that. Great describtion and imagery. Great job and good luck in the contest.


  • Butterfly.Wingz
    September 30, 2008

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    oh hunny this is amazingly written...needles terrify me!!!! but this had alot of power and deep emotion through out and paints picture of the torment of addiction...GREAT WORK
    xox
    Tasha


  • Meej
    September 28, 2008

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    this is a strong write about addiction. I like how you mention that its not done for fun but to hide..I truelly believe that drugs are the ultimate escape mechanism and that people who take drugs might have fun on them but a truelly happy person doesnt need them. this poem flows well and keeps the reader going from stanza to stanza


  • chasing rainbows
    September 8, 2008
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    Fan-fucking-tastic. Honestly. Beautiful.

    Peace & love,
    xx Sin


  • Jacquelyn
    August 3, 2008

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    Awsome! all to real for me, but that's what I really like about this poem it's all most excatly describing myself when something,anything goes wrong or I can't handle.... Well the drugs handle it for me. It's alot easier that way. REALLY GOOD

  • Ulimate
    July 21, 2008
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    You described my brother perfectly and a road I almost traveled. Well done and keep writing.


  • angelcalled666
    June 30, 2008
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    I really like this♥


  • Christina-is-crazy
    June 18, 2008

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    This is a really great poem,
    keep up the good work,
    Thank you for entering the contest.
    And good luck
    ♥ christina


  • The Angel in Black
    June 18, 2008

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    Holy balls! You have got some freaking talent here. I loved the subject matter, and how it shows the flip side of addiction. I just put one up for a contest about addiction to crystal meth you might want to check out.


  • GypsyEyes
    June 1, 2008

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    me likey this one! very powerful! i can completely relate! thank you so much for entering my contest and i wish you the best of luck! CarnalNineTailedFox


  • xxRainbowDawnxx
    May 24, 2008

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    Many people have pre concieved ideas of why people have anorexia or obesity, why people drink to much and why people take drugs and they wont listen to any reason you give for it... as I drink a lot at the moment I can relate as people always presume it's to do with being lonely but it's not just that. Well put though.


  • Catatonia
    May 4, 2008

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    Unrelenting

    Addiction, such a cruel beast to be true. I to have experienced this pain, sorrow and wretchedness. At times the consumption was almost to much to bear, thank your for this write, if it opens even one eye... then your words will linger... forever


  • BellaD
    April 27, 2008

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    Very moving

    I have not been there myself but some people very close to me have...you capture the feelings well and make me recall the helplessness and despair I feel as the loved one who is powerless to make a difference.


  • MusicMattnessLives
    February 28, 2008
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    good job. i have two brothers who are drug addicts so i understand. good luck and good write.

  • raggyann
    January 1, 2008
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    ya i sad to say i realy have been there
    addiction knows no names
    and some loose their lifes and others get clean and live with their pasts
    this was sad but true life
    you wrote it well


  • szne416
    December 17, 2007
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    what a piece. you simultaniously made me horrified (not a bad thing) and intrigued... your monsters are very real here. usually i hate styles like this, but in your case the words made the structure, and it wasn't full of random words in random places. beautiful use of style, word choice, and structure here.


  • shadow-cry
    November 26, 2007

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    I love the structure of this poem and the use of rhyme. It works really well and really touched my heart. I especially liked the line: "Tears in glitter mascara flow" Your choice of words was perfect and well placed. Good job!


  • Dead Star--x
    November 13, 2007
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    i love it and i am speechless
    your a finalist!
    Dead Star--x


  • blondone
    September 29, 2007

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    sure have been right there this touches the heart lovely flow and the imagery is a wow love the form you used and the background thank you for entering


  • Whoochi gold member
    July 16, 2007

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    All i will say is...I Understand... Best of Luck! Ya know I love your stuff....


  • DarkEmptySoul13
    June 28, 2007

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    very emotional

    waw.. this poem is very emotional.. very good write.."youthink you know me?" waw.. it touched my heart.. it brought like a tear to my eye.. i felt pain.. i felt like i was reading something written by myself cuz it's exactly what i wanted to express all this time..


  • Last Pixie
    May 11, 2007
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    nice work. the end has a shocking little twist. passionate. wonderful write. keep it up.


  • WhatLiesBeneath
    May 3, 2007

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    This is an amazing poem. Meaning, pain and addiction. I love all three of those things when they come together. The way you set it out was fantastic and your words were full of meaning. I loved it. Thanks for entering.


  • DelaneyDisaster
    May 1, 2007

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    wow...i really like this, its an amazing poem, you did an extremly good job... it amazed me, good luck in the contest!


  • xlilliexdiesx
    April 26, 2007

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    wow thats really good. I cant relate but i really like. I think that you did a good job expressing the emotions through out it. I can honestly say I didnt get bored


  • 6-Ft-UnDeR
    April 20, 2007

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    i enjoyed your poem..it really was emotional and drugs are often the death of youth that know no other way to deal with their pain


  • LaLaLie
    April 9, 2007
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    very emotional write. good luck and thanks for entering.


  • crystallynnbradford
    April 9, 2007
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    this was a very good poem...it was very touching and I wish you the best of luck in the contest


  • Alasar Minoko
    April 9, 2007

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    Very touching cant personally relate again, but you can feel the emotion there.

    An awesome write.

    Keep up the writing I think you will continue to amaze.


  • Green-eyed Junkie
    April 3, 2007
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    been there, done that. nice write.

  • xxRainbowDawnxx
    April 3, 2007
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    You never really 'know' somebody


    i have many times thought i have known those close to me and often enough I haven't.... it just comes to show pepole have secret lives these days more than ever.


  • Rainbow-High
    April 2, 2007

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    Wowwwww, this was sooo sad and it literally broke my heart. You did an amazing job getting this story across as personal and realistic. I loved the detail and the idea behind the poem. Good luck in all of the contests.


  • ConfindThoughts
    March 24, 2007

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    Very Deep And Very Good

    Really I am just speechless
    your poem hit home really hard and left
    me stuck in a time that has passed


  • acidnwonderland
    March 23, 2007

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    OH MY GOD i love this poem, it's amazing. its exactly how it feels/how i feel its beautifully written.
    i'm astonished!


  • x.digital.love.x
    March 13, 2007
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    oh babeh....wow. this is amaz.ing. i really love this one. tears actually started flooding my eyes when i read tis one. i've been there, oh dear, have i been there. this write is truely tragic, but its still amazing. i love it.


  • okadadokie
    March 9, 2007

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    Such a sad, depressing poem. I can sense their pain, and regrets. To often this world is cast down in kaos, with the many things they make to kill us. Don't be afraid, your never alone. Good luck.
    ~Oka


  • Endeavor gold member
    March 9, 2007

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    Kim

    This is so powerfull

    the accuracy is near amazing

    It is most certanly a compelling need

    One with a limited excape rout

    good ending

    Lying waste in addictions

    depression sets in

    fiend no more as cries of anguish over come

    for this beautifully tragedy

    ~was the death of youth.

    Rick


  • XHollowXEyesX
    February 28, 2007

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    this is an amazing poem.
    I can feel the emotion and power when i read it.
    you have really touched the subject/that way of life, deeply. havent read many like it.
    thankyou for entering.
    love the style.


  • Random Thoughts
    February 27, 2007

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    Really close to home for me aswell as heaps of other people i suspect, open sharing and releasing of these sorts of things is brave and necessary i believe and it is written so truthfully and says it all really!!
    My thoughts exactly.
    Thanks for sharing,

    Brenden


  • Zombie-x
    February 26, 2007
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    WOW.
    Baby;;
    You amaze me.
    best of luck.

  • sagaciouzdainty07
    February 20, 2007
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    sorry

    i forgot to show love with the lil w.e these point animals are..haha

  • sagaciouzdainty07
    February 20, 2007

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    Bittersweet Demise

    i love lines 13-16 because the writer or in this case junkie is opening up and almost reminding themselves why they do it... i can feel the pain as that line is written onto the page... because self-evaluation is never easy when you realize your killing yourself and you can't stop...

    beautifully tragedy is a smidge typo but i definately got what u meant by it and id liek to sum up this comment by saying i really enjoyed reading this.. im actually gnna print it out and put it out for a friend to hopefully see... thank you for sharing your gift
    <3chech


  • aslanlight
    February 6, 2007
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    For fun!

    Yeah you bring up a very important point, we're not doing it for fun, well maybe that's partly it at first but mainly it's to hide from life that's grey and alien to us.

    Thanx

    Love, light & peace

    Georgia


  • A.N. Divine
    January 23, 2007
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    I like the unconventional structure and feel.
    Brutal write.

    -C


  • XXBrunettexBarbieXX
    January 14, 2007

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    I totally understand this poem..I was there one and its a horrible place t be..such a fiht everyday..this poem was very well writee, powerful and emotional..I can totaly relate to this all the way..i enjoyed reading this. you are a talented author keep writting!

  • LaurenLightning--x
    December 27, 2006

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    WoW..

    This is fantastic!
    I have to say, i totally hate the idea of all the spacing and fancey line work, NORMALY. But it just fits with this poem... And I like it... It's weird ^.^

    You think I do it for fun
    I don't, I do it to hide
    ~ from me
    ~ from you.

    I love those lines. I can relate to them..
    And I love the ending :

    ~was the death of youth.

    I wasn't expecting it. I was expecting like.. me or you or her or him. Just one person. But when you say "youth" I think of more than one. I don't know, that may not be the idea you had when writing it. But it's what I think.

    Thanks for entering and Good Luck!!

    Bleeding Glitter xX


  • BabyxBadger
    December 26, 2006

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    I've been there and staying there. First part well explained. I get a bit annoyed though by anti drug poems though, because if people bothered to just look at my profile or poem quickly, you'd realise I do them and I get pissed off with people disagreeing with it.Especially in my contests... But all the same you made a good point and it was a beautiful piece of poetry. Well done
    xxx


  • starsandmoonshine
    December 9, 2006

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    WOW

    THAT WAS REALLY GOOD YOU TOOK US TOO THE INSIDE OF A USER AND LET US FEEL HOW THEY ARE TRUELY FEELING GREAT JOB IN DOING THAT
    STARS

  • starsandmoonshine
    December 9, 2006
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    WOW

    THAT WAS REALLY GOOD YOU TOOK US TOO THE INSIDE OF A USER AND LET US FEEL HOW THEY ARE TRUELY FEELING GREAT JOB IN DOING THAT
    STARS


  • PerVirtuous
    December 8, 2006

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    Very Descriptive

    Excellent imagery. I can see the actors and the props. I can smell the vomit and feel the tension in the air. But, I do not feel what drives a person to give themselves up so easily. Why would they take their most cherished posession and give it away in exchange for something sickening? I know I ask a lot, but you are capable.


  • CarCrashHumor
    November 24, 2006

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    (corrections: "fiend" --> "friend" ??)
    i think my favorite part was "You think you know me

    ~ the junkie

    ~ the user

    ~your nightmares come true."

    this was a good topic.
    thanks for entering


    • mysticstorm gold member
      November 24, 2006
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      Thank you for the comment and correction. Yet fiend is right.
      Best to you in your contest!!!


  • Forbidden Image
    November 10, 2006
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    thansk for your entry . beautifl background and poem


  • BloodyCrystalEmbers
    November 9, 2006

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    Wow, this piece was written beautifully...I do not really know of anyone in my life who has used this stuff, but this piece truly broke my heart, it was written so well, very intuitive,the honesty in it, truly impresses me...You have so much talent and it shows...keep it up i loved this piece it is truly a piece of art, the flow was great...kept me captivated until the end...thanks for entering it!!




    ~Terri Anna~

  • optional
    November 8, 2006
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    make's me very sad make's me very glad make's me very aware make's me unapproachable,seems like it's an abusive addiction
    that ignoant soul's particpate in seem's like self medication
    by amature doctor's of pharmacy lost in a world of do-it yourself treatment.Awareness is my main concern my oppinion
    Stop Stop all the missuse and abuse by illfated victim's

  • Saraphira
    November 7, 2006

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    "Tears in glitter mascara flow"

    It's the glitter. Small details like that make an insane amount of impact, and you've got lovely things like this throughout the piece. Very strong imagery.

    Only thing I can recommend is a bit of pruning. You got more pronouns and be verbs and articles than you need. Junk some of those (literally, just skip them unless you really need them or find an elegant replacement) and you'll have a fantastic piece.

    Much respect,
    Gren


  • Stardust100
    November 7, 2006

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    WOW very greatly written and the way you have set this out seem to glide the reader through. I like how you set the reason of the addiction the rush the buzz then the result fantastic write.

  • xxCrimsonxRazorsxx
    November 7, 2006

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    this is effing awesome...i was able to really get into it which is really rare for me...you did an amazing job...

    x's and o's
    Jessi

  • unknownpleasure
    November 7, 2006

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    This was certainly better than the majority of AP offerings on the same subject. The Pink Floyd reference was a bit cringe-inducing though and spoilt it for me...


  • Silent Cougar Moderators member
    November 5, 2006

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    Such a soleful message passes through as you read this one. displays an image of pain, but the use of 'comfortably numb' addresses what clarifies for some, the end product. well done. I mean, 'really' well done.


  • Talking Toni gold member
    November 5, 2006

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    Very deep!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

    Very dark and deep the writing and expession here is great. But the content is a little too dark for me. I know it is supposed to be and I try not to critique many dark writes because I can't identify with thewmvery well. But like I said you have a telent for using the right choice of words to express yourself here!! You have literally opened up your soul here. Do you really feel this way in real life or is this just for this poem? I hope it is the latter of the two. There is alot of pain showing through your work. I have had very painful situations as well , but I try to look for the light in lighter ways I guess. I may write about something sad or painful but I try to finish it with the light overcoming the dark times. Anyway well done on the write, expressing yourself was definitely accomplished here!!Thank you for sharing!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!Toni


  • Dirty and Broken
    November 5, 2006
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    wow....very good....

  • White Dove
    November 5, 2006

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    A superb hard hitting potrail of a broken being. The imagery is intense and shocking in this piece. A dark and realistic look at the world of addiction. God Bless.


  • innocence jaded.xx
    November 5, 2006

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    Wow! Amazing poem! I love how you wrote it so uniquely. The words you used were great! I had to look some of them up to see what they meant. lol anyways, again, great poem! Keep it up! Hope to see more from you! You're an amazing poet!


  • Enmity-xX
    November 5, 2006

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    Darkly, and very painfulyl brilliant write.
    Love the broken down concept, very effective.
    Besides the technical, such a distinct, real feeling of being rock bottom, not just hitting it.

    Thank you for sharing this.


  • freespirit51
    November 5, 2006

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    Very dark and painful poem. I almost lost a loved one to suicide and it pains me to think of how close they came. Your words bring vivid images of pain and soorw. Most of all I feel the regret in your words..Great work.

  • Rof Cau
    November 5, 2006

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    pepper!

    hey this was very much into realism. very uncomfortable read and that alone is testament to talent.

    there is some editing - like you said the form can do with some " changes e.g. "fun" can totally stand alone as well as "from me" step down "from you".

    Quodos on the intro and first verse though: lay out perfect.

    THe pink floyd line and the last line jar somewhat. the last line is the climax yet it is totally different from the rest of the poem. While most of the lines here rock and shock and hip it to the moon - the last line hits me as somewhat of a hollow ridden cliche.

    But even with my minor grievances I can only conclude that you write pepper!!
    Edited on Nov 05, 10:03 because ''.


  • SomeoneNobodyLikes
    November 3, 2006

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    amazing write my friend!
    my favorite lines:
    "You think I do it for fun

    I don't, I do it to hide

    from me, from you."

    --you put this well, so sad but beautifully written!
    take care and keep writing!
    ♥ SomeoneNobodyLikes


  • tawk gold member
    November 2, 2006
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    Wow, BRAVO What a powerful write!!!


  • solarman
    November 2, 2006
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    Simply amazing piece of poetry!!!


  • eyesofanangel524
    November 2, 2006

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    Outstanding

    Hit so close to home. You have done a strong solid write about the lost soul in addiction. Your imagery absolutely incredible. Your form..I love it..kind of like spiraling out of control. Which is what happens. No addict wants to be an addict, they just lose themselves to the comfort brought forth from the reliever of pain. Brought a tear to my eye...well done my dear, well done. Thank you for sharing. Now I need to shake my mind from the past. Thank you again. Dawn


  • Grey Mouser
    November 2, 2006
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    I know the struggle you have been through dealing with the loved ones addiction.

    This is just the best, truly. A perfectly awesome treatise.


  • ebbandflow
    November 1, 2006
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    There are different reasons for drug use. Some are "acceptable", some are not. Using drugs to forget or to numb out your thoughts and emotions is not one of them. The longer you take sorting out your problems and dealing with them, the longer it will take and harder it will be to do so. Good poem.. great flow.


  • slightlyFey
    November 1, 2006
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    wow! great job with the images and painting such a realistic picture for the reader. Such power and truth are in your words, this piece grabs you from the beginning lines and has a ending very fitting to the subject. I personally loved:
    "You think I do it for fun
    I don't, I do it to hide
    from me, from you."
    those words spoke to me. Great job again and best of luck with the contest. you have my vote, too bad it does not count
    Michelle Fey


  • calendar girl
    November 1, 2006
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    woooww that was astounding


  • desperatelyobvious
    November 1, 2006
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    the higher you get, the harder you fall.

    i don't really know what to say. this is absolutely stunning. the structure of the poem is almost as amazing as the words. to take the reader through such emotions, the ups and downs. i can kind of see the way you flow up, and then crash down, as if the poem itself is a trip. this poem is stunning.


  • Tam
    November 1, 2006
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    Standing Ovation!

    Sis...first...I LOVE YOU!
    This is the best writing I've witnessed from your amazing pen.
    So raw and real, honest and painful.
    The words you incorporated from the contest are perfectly placed within your powerful journey of personal war.
    The layout meanders on the screen as though the life of someone struggling with addiction...it adds to the effect. Very well done.
    And, I love the background you've used. This is truly an impressive write, for those who know this battle, will recognize the profound meaning within.
    Your words paint the darkness to a frightening likeness here.
    STANDING OVATION!!!!!!!!!!
    Bravo, Sis, Bravo!
    All my love, Tammy xoxoxoxox

  • ocerus
    November 1, 2006
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    Sad, but of course, quite good. I never did drugs (maybe I should have!) but I have my problems too, and I reccomend church. Just believing that God loves you can be very, very helpful in life. I need it. God bless and good luck! - oce


  • soulfultia gold member
    November 1, 2006
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    A walk through the life of junkie...you portrayed quite a vivid picture for everyone to capture, I feel sure this will hit home with many readers in one way or another. Good job, you should be very proud of this piece, another fine pen from you always a pleasure to read your work! Keep it up ~Tia


  • SilverButterfly gold member
    November 1, 2006
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    This piece should be spread all over!!! It is a fanstic message for people who are hooked on drugs. Keep the messages coming!!! GBY


  • Inside and out
    November 1, 2006
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    Bravo! Your poem is so realistic. It is captivating. Well done dear poet. Good luck in the contest.


  • apoeticinjustice gold member
    November 1, 2006
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    an incredible piece, very telling of the nature of addiction and the effects it has on the addict. This piece drew me in with the somber words and the interesting format...from beginning to end, it was an emotional freefall not unlike the fall the addict takes. As for critique, all I can offer is a few spelling points or suggestions:

    comfortable or comfortably? not sure here
    time past - time passed
    fiend or friend?? not sure here, as either works

    Overall, a very good write, kudo's

    Rory


  • ScarletO gold member
    November 1, 2006
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    Wow, that was truley intense. Such a waste to lose all that time self-harming, then to wake up one day looking at an old worn out junkie. Everyone seems to have vices and times when they dislike themselves, when it goes too far, abuse happens. Very good poem of the depth of drug addiction.


  • AliceinPoetryLand gold member
    November 1, 2006
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    Brilliant

    I haven't been there myself but could feel and see vividly everything you wrote. A truly intense and powerful write Kim. I also liked the way you set it out. Every line had me riveted right to the end. Expertly penned my friend
    If you have been there I am truly sorry but also so very grateful that you are here now to be the very best friend I could ask for
    Gaylene
    Edited on Nov 01, 3:54 p.m. because 'spelling edit'.


  • Puppydog gold member
    November 1, 2006
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    VERY EMOTIONAL POEM

    I have been around a little of this but I could never get caught up in anything like it because I have seen the pain and anguish, and the destruction of ones mind and body there is always a way to happiness without falling into this kind life.

  • Chief Callahan
    November 1, 2006
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    Two thumbs up

    That was really good and I thought I know you. lol...Intense writing with great detail that all who have been in a similar situation can relate to. This was very deep mystic and worthy of praise.


  • Firequeen
    November 1, 2006
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    Wow sis
    I so understand this..
    This hit hard..
    very intense sis
    Bravo.
    Love sis


  • Sgt B
    November 1, 2006
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    Very very powerful, I hope this gets around & helps someone. Good job. ~Ron~


  • Fire N Ice
    November 1, 2006
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    FANTASTIC !!!!!

    This is very intense, and im sure many can relate to the effects that addiction has, you describe with such force and power, bringing it all together in a fantastic write, this is truly amazing work. You should be very proud of yourself


  • Congruence
    November 1, 2006
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    Very Good

    Your writing shifts again, I do not know if this is from experience - as a piece of writing, I liked the style, the layout - very interesting, the poem certaintly hit its stride later on, becoming more and more intense.

    If this is from personal experience I applaud the honesty - although I guess not judging by the contest, good luck though.

    James
    Edited on Nov 01, 1:14 p.m. because ''.


  • Smirnoff Ice
    November 1, 2006
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    I haven't been there but i felt the emotion behind this piece and i really liked the way it was set out.Loved the line
    tears in glitter mascara flow.Excellent line.A great piece that worked really well

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