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Make It Massachusetts

If it’s excitement you want

Or a place full of history and fun,

From the west coast to east coast

Massachusetts is the place to come.



Start with the heritage of The Berkshires

View the beautiful mountain walls,

And autumn colors leave you breathless

You’ll be on top of it all.



The Mohawk Trail offers even more

From maple sugar to ancient potholes,

Indian trading posts and pow wow’s,

Historic views that touch the soul.



Deerfield will touch your inner child

Spend time in the butterfly’s home,

And you’ll leave peaceful and serene

Even a dinosaur museum to rest the bones.



Lexington and Concord is the place to be

Relive The Battle on Lexington Green,

Hear the shot heard round the world

History at it’s best is what you’ve seen.



Salem.. Witch trials, history and a museum

See The House of The Seven Gables,

But take heed not to be bewitched

As you listen closely to hear the fables.



Boston is full of history and beauty

Visit The Boston Tea Party ship and hear the tale,

Or see the USS Constitution and talk to her crew

Then take a walk on the Freedom Trail.



Plymouth has something for the young and old

See the people in period dress,

Stop and see a replica of the legendary Mayflower

And Plymouth Rock, it will leave you impressd.



Go for a Whale Watch off Cape Cod

View the whales in all their wonder,

Free to safely swim as they will

Splashing their tales as they go under.



So now I’ve taken you from coast to coast

Hope you had fun and enjoyed the view,

Come again and stay a bit longer

So, make it Massachusetts, won’t you.




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Photo is of Garfield, Massachusetts in The Bershires in Western Massachusetts.
Written October 31st, 2006

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  • SilverButterfly gold member
    November 7, 2006
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    This is a great write. i was in your state years ago and it was breath-takingly beautiful!I love how you have promoted Massachusetts. GBY


  • freespirit51
    November 5, 2006
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    Thanks keeyley I am so glad you enjoyed it. It was interesting and a challenge to write.


  • keeyley
    November 5, 2006
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    wow i loved it,i am a new yorker though,but i have been to boston ,really nice!keep it up

  • freespirit51
    November 3, 2006
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    Thanks Liz. I thought it was an interesting challange to try and write this style of poetry, and it was. I am glad to see it went over.


  • Erotik Rose silver member
    November 3, 2006
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    You have captured the state of Massachusetts so very well here, thank you for sharing this with us.


  • SmokinHotWhiteTiger
    November 2, 2006
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    Great entry!

    Wow I must say you definitely took me east to west and beyond with this poem. Very nice entry for my contest. Seeing as I never been to Massachusetts I really found all of thisd quite interesting. Nice poem entry here you have placed and I appreciate ya taking the time to enter such a wonderful piece. Best of Luck in the contest. Sincerely, Whitetiger1251

  • freespirit51
    November 1, 2006
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    Thanks KP for your kind words. I would love to send it to them but with my luck they would hit me with an enjoyment tax.

  • freespirit51
    November 1, 2006
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    Thanks tender wolf for your kind words. I am glad you enjoyed it. And the trip wasn't free I'll be sending you the bill...LOL

  • freespirit51
    November 1, 2006
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    Thanks aghanishah for your kind words. Glad to see you enjoyed it. I have been writing regularly. Maybe not all my work has been getting to you but feel free to stop by and browze anytime.

  • freespirit51
    November 1, 2006
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    Thanks Emmjay for your kind words. We have alot of history, from the Pilgrims to The Revolution, Tea Party, Paul Revere. Just to name a few.

  • freespirit51
    November 1, 2006
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    Thanks Son of Jim for your kind words. I liked Yankee candle but it has changed in the last few years. I loved the Magic Wings and Dr.Spooky's. The kinds loved them. More fun than Yankee Candle.

  • freespirit51
    November 1, 2006
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    Thanks Vampirelestat for your kind words. I wrote the poem first and worked on the rhyme after. There was much more I could have said but I did not wasnt to write the great american novel. If I said all I wanted then you wouldn't have to visit. Massachusetts is full of American History.

  • freespirit51
    November 1, 2006
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    Thanks LadyUnique for your kind words. I enjoyed Mohawk Trail when I went in '96 until we got into an auto accident and spent the night in the hospital and 2 months out of work. But I love the Cape.

  • freespirit51
    November 1, 2006
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    Thanks cyberartist for your kind words. Most of the American history started here in Massachusetts. The pilgrims landed here, The Revolutionary War also. If you think of the USA you have to think Massachusetts.


  • freespirit51
    November 1, 2006
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    Thanks so much cherche-d-ame for your kind words. I hope the memories were fond ones.


  • freespirit51
    November 1, 2006
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    ThANKS Sandi for your kind words. Hope it brought back the good memories for you.

  • freespirit51
    November 1, 2006
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    Thnks Brandy. Sorry it brought back the "Painful" memories. But I have been doing some sightseeing myself lately and have been enjoying Mass a bit.


  • freespirit51
    November 1, 2006
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    Thanks jbfisthebest for your kind words. I am so glad you enjoyed it.


  • freespirit51
    November 1, 2006
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    Thanks Jbloc for your kind words. Glad it brought back fond memories for you.

  • KP 2 Reborn
    November 1, 2006
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    You should send this to the government or something, they'll put out a comercial with your jingle. Great job, a very well written piece that flows and rhymes very well.
    All the best,
    Kp


  • Whispering Wind Moderators member
    November 1, 2006
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    wonderful

    i feel like i been there through your eyes,this is beautiful and filled with a wonderful tour free of charge.your so good


  • The.poet.of.hearts
    November 1, 2006
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    ohhhhhhhhh great naa well imagined people don't have to go your land you have sketch a well portrait and film of it
    it was a very nice piece and bold in ryhme
    i dont think it was easy for you to write bcz i tried once its always difficult
    keep it up ! i m seeing now a days you write less i mean this link i got after many days
    by
    the poet of hearts and beautiful words


  • Emmjay
    November 1, 2006
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    Good Poem!

    Beautiful photo of Garfield freespirit51. That in itself gets me itchy to go there ! I've never been to mainland US. You've certainly painted a beautiful picture with your poem. Very vivid and oh so very colourful. Sounds like there's a lot of history there too!
    Poetically sound and a strong rhyming scheme. Good writing here.
    Best wishes in the contest
    Sincerely Emmjay

  • Son of Jim
    November 1, 2006
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    Not a historian or even semiexpert on Mass,
    but I have been a few times, deerfield to the yankeecandleco, mostly.
    This is a good piece, well structured and rhymes pleasantly, would be such a good piece for say a travelers bureau.
    great work, good luck.
    Jim


  • TheVampireLestat
    November 1, 2006
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    I liked your enthusiasm and vivid imagery that you harnessed to create this piece. It moves the reader and paints a distinct portrait-and almost like a very catchy brochure, persuades the reader that Massachusetts is indeed the place to vacation to and why. You certainly have the power of persuasion and imagery, I'll grant you that. However, I have one slight piece of advice. I think that in many areas, you strive to achieve end rhyme, however cut yourself short of really saying what I think you actually wanted to. I think that you limited what you would have liked to say in full-force about the state-and instead stuck with the end rhyme. It is well written, but I just believe some of the stanzas lacked a particular flow because you limited your choice of words. That's just my opinion from one poet to another, but still I applaud you. You don't have to take my word for it-it's still an excellent piece. Blessed Be.


  • LadyUnique silver member
    November 1, 2006
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    i use to go for long weekends in Mass when i lived in Connecticut...especially in the fall. the Mohawk trail is awesome
    love the rhyme to this
    good writing you've really shown Massachusetts off


  • Cyber Artist Moderators member
    November 1, 2006
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    Its not a place that one thinks of when planning a trip to America but you have intrigued me. If I ever leave my island I would love to visit now I have read this travel poem great job very enticing....
    Paul


  • cherche -d -ame
    November 1, 2006
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    thank you for a beautiful memory. A few years ago we drove from Maryland to New England....saw many beautiful places along the way, met many great people and Massachusetts is now on the list of my favorite places .My mom was visiting from Europe and she as well fell in love with the beauty of that state
    Best wishes in this contest,
    reenie


  • Sandi Alford gold member
    November 1, 2006
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    You are a great tour guide! This was a delightful romp through a beautiful state I've had the pleasure of enjoying it many times before leaving the states. Wonderfully done

    Best wishes in this contest! blessings Sandi


  • Gone2007
    November 1, 2006
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    LOL. This was very good. You did your homework..lmao the " Mohawk Trail" part sent shivers down my spine due to memiories you and i share of a cute "little" car accendent we had coming home from there but other than that, It was great to read and very true.


  • Loveandblessings2u gold member
    November 1, 2006
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    very, very nice poem, makes me want to visit.
    this was a joy to read
    you have done a well job on this.
    never knew much about massachesetts, but after reading this i learned a lot. thanks for the lesson.
    good luck to you.

    joyce


  • Inconspicuous.
    October 31, 2006
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    i love this poem!
    i actually, used to live in
    MASSACHESETTS myself (wakefield).
    and everything you said about
    it, the places, the landmarks,
    was so very true.
    the view from Cape Cod is
    absolutly breathtaking!
    this is truly an
    amazing write...
    it makes me want to go back
    your rhyming was ABSOLUTLY
    perfect and totally flawless..
    gret job && goodluck in the contest

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