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Once A Man... Twice A Child

Once a man… twice a child…something I remember my dad saying
so many friends and family gathered around me… the eldest praying

Once full of life… energy abound…  
strong hands... that once broke the ground

A once stern look in his eyes… coupled with love... and security
he was what a dad was suppose to be

I can smell it now…
but for my mother… I have to be strong… some how

They say that God's voice is like many waters… I think that I can hear Him
feel the sorrow in my tears… as they reach my eyes rim

Like fingerprints… his laugh was so unique
and you could feel the love in his heart… every time he would speak

I am not done learning… he has taught me so much…
life is going to be so unbearable… without his fatherly touch

I’m losing control…
my hearts beginning to unfold

I can remember the first fish that I ever caught…to me it was as big as a whale
my dad smiled at me… and said “son, you have done well”

I can remember dad buying me my first car…
a 7 year old jalopy… I felt like a star

All of the wonderful things he had done for me… I took most of them for granted
there were so many hopes, dreams and ideas he had planted

There are so many precious memories…
as I hear from my mother... to God… her pleas

As her tears covered the earth… with visions of tomorrow…
I could feel the pain in her soul… as she expressed her sorrow

I am feeling so much sadness right now… and I do not think anyone knows…
how can anyone possibly understand how I feel… my pain and my woes?

A body without blemish… laying before me with ease…
Lord I beg you!!!... just make him breathe

There is just one more thing to my dad… that I really need to say

Once a man… twice a child… something my dad said often…
now… I am sitting here..

fighting back the tears… as they close his coffin.




 

 

 

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Written October 31st, 2006 Option 3.

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  • tresmemphis gold member
    August 23

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    I understand this pain totally. Thank you for writing and sharing for it is thru this poem I can receive some comfort. I looked at my father in his coffin and begged to see his chest move up and down hoping it was all just a dream. But it wasnt...it was a real live nightmare. One to be lived daily. I too re-live precious memories especially in times when i feel like I really need him and I close my eyes and think of what he might say and hear his voice. His voice was always so poised, sure, comforting, and relaxing. I knew everything would be okay. So, thank you for writing and I hope you find comfort in those loving memories.


  • Jeremy0826 silver member
    April 22

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    This is so moving and a wonderful write here my friend! Congratulations to you on your three trophies here and good luck to you with it in this contest. Take care and thanks a lot for sharing this one here!




    Jeremy0826

  • piccola silver member
    June 26, 2008

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    A body without blemish… laying before me with ease…
    Lord I beg you!!!... just make him breathe

    tears are welling up in my eyes ... this is a beautiful tribute. well wishes in the contest.


  • enitsirhC
    June 21, 2008

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    Moving

    This is so moving, and touches every part of my heart.

    Very well written.


    Good luck in your contest!


  • Aliya Abbas
    June 21, 2008

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    this poen is really painful which can make anyone cry. all the best for the contest. i hope u win this time as well.


  • MrsJones
    June 21, 2008

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    Wow, this is such a moving piece. It's so hard to describe loss and how it makes you feel, and you did an excellent job of it in this piece. I can't imagine losing a parent, thank you for submitting this piece.


  • storiesuntold gold member
    June 6, 2008

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    Good write an heart felt

    I sat with the grand children when my Dad was laid to rest and with the children I told them so much of their grandfather and how he was the best . Together we shed tears of love and joy for he was their within them all once again a little boy


  • Dragonheart1 gold member
    June 6, 2008

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    Great write full of emotions and love. It is great to trasure such memories as they will last forever-even after one is gone.


  • OnceUponAMind silver member
    May 29, 2008

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    Very sad write, though seems like your dad was a fantastic man, I am sorry for your loss Thank you for sharing you work here.


  • NeonRose
    April 12, 2008
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    A powerful and emotional write. Congratulations on winning the Silver.


  • liquidmindforever gold member
    October 3, 2007

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    There is just one more thing to my dad… that I really need to say
    Once a man… twice a child… something my dad said often…

    Now… I am sitting here..
    Fighting back the tears… as they close his coffin.

    How lovely to have wonderful memories of your dad and to be able to share them whenever you feel the need.

    Thank you for entering
    DEATH

    love light peace

    liquid



  • Jessica Lyndsay
    July 6, 2007

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    WoW I totally feel your emotions which is exactly what I wanted keep up the good work and thanks for entering my contest! Goog luck!


  • queens1
    June 8, 2007

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    Outstanding.

    "My heart is beginning to unfold" really touched me. Such an intimate view into what you go through when you lose someone you loved. No father for me, but my mother means everything to me. Good luck in the contest.
    Patty

  • heartofpainfultears
    June 8, 2007
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    nice write great job


  • x Bright Eyes x
    January 11, 2007

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    wow i like the emotion in this but i dont know how it feels to lose a dad as i dont have one but from reading this i can sense what it would be like to lose a farther

  • fallen-leaf
    January 10, 2007

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    Wow!

    Omg, this is just wow. It is so sweet and heartbreaking. Thank you so much for sharing such a wonderful write full of deep meaning! And good luck in my contest!


  • Heavenly Angel gold member
    November 28, 2006
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    This touched my heart
    My Daddy was and IS, my hero and poetry of a Father's love always seems to strike a nerve with me...
    Most beautifully poignant; thank you for sharing..I wish you all the best in this contest

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