heartbroken
somethings died
tears have shattered
silent cries
no where to turn
no where to go
just left to wallow alone
strangled breath
I must go on
the hurt inside is so far gone
hard to swallow
choking back pain
yesterdays memories aren't the same
every breath is like a fight
just another sleepless night
short lived distractions
never lasting satisfaction
the words cease to stop
forcing every last drop
of painful recollection
the heart and mind a disconnection
wanting another chance
holding onto hope
for one last dance
a metamorphosis of emotions
change rapidly at a dime
if only that spinning coin
could go back and change time
Author notes
Written October 30th, 2006
A contest entry
- Give me your break-up poems by trekkergirl.
400 points, ended January 5, 80 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Just one suggestion. This reads as one long paragraph. I would break it up into stanza's. Makes it so much easier to read. Other than that this is a very well written poem.
Thanks for sharing this and thanks for entering it into this contest. -
I recently had to deal with losing a friend. it was truly hard for me to cope with. I thought that this was great, sad. LIke it was ripping up my heart. I can relate to this. I hope things worked out.
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sad
This is so mixed with feelings and raw emotions. You've done a wonderful job expressing yourself. I hope you feel better?
Kari -
Sadly Beautiful
This is sadly painful...but beautifully written...You are very talented my dear. and I enjoyed this read so very much..May God Bless! Hope to see alot more from you! -
Sad, but beautiful! It's always so sad when people have to be crushed by these horrible feelings! Just remember, tomorrow is another day, no matter how corny that sounds! Great write! Great job!
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Good write
good rhythm and rhyme,i liked it!Good work I enjoyed reading this poem!Lisa K Haslett raytown Missouri!
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