I love you so much,
That I'm forced to hate you.
You're not here for me.
Why should you be?
I'm just another person in your life.
I'm meaningless.
If I were to pull a knife,
Be gone, dead.
You wouldn't shed a tear,
Just simply bow your head.
Have you fogotten my name?
It hasn't been that long.
It's not like I can trully
Put you to blame,
But knowing that I love with all I can,
And am not loved back?
It's wrong.
No point in life.
I've used the knife.
I'm in a pool of water,
Arms are numb.
World is spining,
I'm falling slowly,
You're not here to catch me.
I don't hate you,
No, I hate myself.
Author notes
Written October 30th, 2006
A contest entry
- continuing war between love and hate 2 by Cerbie20.
1000 points, ended June 14, 2008, 32 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Turn those greenies into Gold (or silver or bronze) pt 8 by whispernthedark.
700 points, ended October 25, 2008, 54 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Sad write, there is nothing like being made to feel as though you are invisible by the one the you love the most. Thank you for entering the contest, good luck.
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whisper
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Hmmm, no, I'm afraid this piece doesn't make me feel like committing suicide at all, I don't suppose you stopped and read the rules did you???
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very good job! lots of emotion here, and that is what gets me. it explains the relationship between love and hate very well... so that is what makes it so good.
You're not here to catch me.
I don't hate you,
No, I hate myself.
it sucks when the one person you love is not there to catch your fall... i know how it feels. and no matter how hard you try, you cannot hate that person, but you can hate and blame yourself, because its always easier. hang in there, it will get better... it may take time, but it will get better. best of luck in life and my contest!
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amazing
wow, this poem really has a hard impact.
its full of love, emotion, destrest, confusion, passion, the words are over flowing.
"I'm falling slowly,
You're not here to catch me."
this line pushes the point that your life revolved around this person, like even though you know they lefat, it still surprises you that when you fall, they're not there, and w/o that, your life can't go on.
"Butknowing that I love with all I can,
And am not loved back?
It's wrong."
this is defenitly one of the most upsetting things a person can go through, your life revolving around a person that is just, not there for you, yet still, even if you don't understand why, your heart skips a beat when being around them.
wonderful poem, i love it!
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Well expressed poem.
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Very Good
This is a very well written piece that sticks it's message in deep. It's full of vivid emotion and lends itself well to the style you chose. Bravo!
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there is a thin line between love and hate and it looks as if this write just may have described it.You have done a great job with this write,as emotions flow with such strength it is almost over whelming.You have painted a real picture of one suffering between the lines of depression and despair.Great Job dear poet.
God Bless
~Cheryl~ -
ah love and hate, they twist into each other often. spinning us into wild madness. spill ink and twist me into the crazy shape of love...
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i like this short lines and interesting breaks too.. creates an all new tone... desperation at its finest. thanks for wentering and good luck!
Abused
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hey! thankx, i wasn't going to make it soo, depressing, like the cut stuff and all, but it was for a depressing contest so...
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This is such a deeply sad and painful write... Love is impossible when it is not a two way street, where consideration and truth flow. Sometimes it happens to help you know inside - you deserve so much better than that.
I wish you all the best. Thank you for all your kind comments on my work as well.
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