We condescend in shades of grays,
Looking beautiful waiting...
Three months and oh,
(i love your skin rough against mine)
Your fingers fumbling over collar bones
The tongue in my mouth
Consumes me with broken hearts
As I,
gasps in the air full of sweat and confusion,
Notice that my life is potent, perfect
There is nothing more Permanent than your
arms around me
I forgot how to breath
and the acid in my blood
might have something to do with it
but when the light hits you that way
makes me feel translucent underneath you.
Kat
Author notes
Written October 30th, 2006
A contest entry
- Tell me a story by mascararunning.
340 points, ended December 19, 2006, 20 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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simply...
beautiful -
good
I think there's alot more to be said, but what you've said so far made me sit still.
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its a 'pondering' piece, one where one has to ask themselves about their love for another. oddly enough, i'm listening to 'lithium' by evanescence, and this poem is almost like it, and yet not... a very well written poem!!
~ wave
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Hm. This is interesting, yes. I like these lines a lot "I forgot how to breath
and the acid in my blood"
Keep up the killer work, take care, and keep on writing!
~ImmortalUndead~ -
Wow I can honestly say that this is competely different from what I've ever read and I really like it. The use of your words are amazing and your vocab is great. Keep up the great work, you have a lot of talent so don't let it go to waste. I wish I had time to read the rest of your work right now but I guess I'll have to later, in the mean time keep on writing.
Awesome job!!!! ^.~ -
wow....deep. I like this write a lot. I am looking forward to reading more of your works. Nice job.
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