Yesterday, today
I have been without your silent stare
I have been unable to enter into words
I have been without their sound
I have been unable to touch them
Poetry must happen to me
the way Old Seventy,
in its rush of water toward the falls,
happens to me
or the way your eyes happen to me
their mixed signals
like a line
ending
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Written October 30th, 2006
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Very nicely done. Poetry to some is just a fun intrest, something to pass time with. Then to others, it is a part of their soul, I know it is mine. That is what I see here, that it is a part of your soul. A wonderful read.
Kelli
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You have a poet's eye, Kelli Marie...
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Poetry must happen to me
yeah, it must happen to me too. but it's not happening much lately. so I come here for inspiration.
I like this one, rudy.
~travis
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35 pages? of what? WOW. I'm conufused. LOL
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I do like the ending better... My first ending would have been better if I had changed one word in is final stanza, but I took the final stanza from the first write & incorporated it as a new poem in my latest collection which is 35 pages at this point.
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ariosto, This was not the ending of the poem as it first appeared... I did cut the final stanza after lute suggested I consider doing that... From your comment, I can see that he was correct as I knew he was. The suggestions from readers has always been helpful & one reason I appreciate this site...
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Appreciate the vote of confidence...
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Thanks, mona... I am pleased that you are writing in your native language, creating your first electronic book. Good luck...
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Interesting. This is very nicely done. I love the ending.
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if
or the way your eyes happen to me
their mixed signals
like a line
ending
is the last verse don't cut it!
My God the metaphor is apt.
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this is wonderful writingh
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Lovely poem as always
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Lute,
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try cutting last verse. Otherwise old seventy roars a bit at flood time don't it?
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Thanks for this comment. We all struggle to say what we think or feel, but some people can say things silently that lure us. I agree with the weather. It is a perfect time to be outdoors, writing, but like most folks I am indoors today. I appreciate you. I will write more as you ask...
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How wonderful to be able to find something written that says what you have been struggling with saying yourself. (Also, I'd be untruthful if I didn't say, a blow to the poetic ego when it seems to roll so simply from a poets fingers but really, mostly very satisfying).
These autumn days are treating us well here -- two recent mtpoet poems.
I suffer from glossophilia. Write more.
Lisa
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