You notice I'm standing here
But you don't really see me
You look through me like a pane of glass
Seeing me almost as a figment of your imagination
Something to disregarded as unreal
Why cant you see me?
Why wont you acknowledge my existence?
Why don't you know I'm here?
Just here waiting for you
I'm invisible to you
You see me as insignificant
Another piece of lustful trash
Not even worth your acknowledgement
Just the annoying speck of dust in your eye
Something to ignore 'til it disappears
Why cant you see me?
Why wont you acknowledge my existence?
Why don't you know I'm here?
Just here waiting for you
I'm invisible to you
I'm finished with being nothing
Tired of not being good enough to be seen
I'm through with playing the invisible girl
Maybe someday I'll be in your line of vision and you'll see
The person you ignored and left standing alone
Why cant you see me?
Why wont you acknowledge my existence?
Why don't you know I'm here?
Just here waiting for you
I'm invisible to you
Why cant you see me?
Why wont you acknowledge my existence?
Why don't you know I'm here?
Just here waiting for you
I'm invisible to you
Author notes
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The 1st few lines of this came into my head earlier as a poem, but as i wrote it down, it kinda took form as lyrics, I wrote it based on all those past crushes I had and how frustrating it was to be invisible to the person
Written May 4th, 2003
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Wow!
I LOVED this line:
"Another piece of lustful trash"
Brilliant, absolutely brilliant. Sometimes the whole repetetive thing can get irritating but here it worked so well! Good similies and metaphors throughout.
Welldone on a brilliant poem!
Goodluck in my contest!
Much love,
Emily x
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thank you
and thanks for putting me on the favourites list! I enjoyed writing this peice it was very cathartic (i think that may be spelled wrongly)
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I really like this poem.. It's - again - intelligently written and with a grating urgent tone that really brings out the frustrated emotion here.
'lustful trash' - what an insightful phrase
I think you've got this just right in terms of the way we berate ourselves over a long-standing, one-side crush.
The whole line of vision thing got me thinking that this poem is actually shaped like a series of arrow-heads. I think it's great to experiment with a poem's physicality, and the widening-shortening rhythm here also suggests a variety of other associations, such as a series of breaths or heartbeats.
Attacking, honest stuff.
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dont touch it!
wow..yea this is true. im invisible to alot of people. but i never let them stop me and u shouldnt either. gettin hurt is one thing but being invisible is another. noone should be invisible. at all.
anyways this is a very good lyrical poem. a nice punk rock beat would go good with this. lol nice job! i loved it!
take care and ill ttyl
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I completly understand! I just got done writing about how I am sick of getting hurt and that I don't love him anymore! You bet! you are so right to say that you don't want to be invisible I know I never want to! It hurts! This is a good lyrical poem! It would be cool as a song!
*Lady*
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