Life is just a path you follow..
on every corner something new
Many doubts that make you swallow..
so much happens that you never knew
Day’s will pass without knowing..
if you see what’s really there
You look and search for inside growing..
and sometimes only find despair
The next bend lays around your corner..
Will it give you what you need?
Can life be honest to your deepest....
you need just like the air you breathe
And waiting all your life to find
a meaning for your night and day
If it comes around the corner
will you see it on your way?
Just sitting there and thinking life over..
you never know what comes around
But hopes and dreams will stay forever..
until the day your future is found
Life is just a path you follow..
on every corner something new
Many doubts that make you swallow..
so much happens that you never knew
Author notes
Life is just a path you follow..
on every corner something new
Written October 30th, 2006
"Huzzah!"
In a list
A contest entry
- All Poetry Adult Idol: Round One by Tangled Angle.
300 points, ended November 11, 2006, 17 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - It's all about the mystery, life is! by S2ndQueen.
450 points, ended April 20, 2007, 35 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Do you know where this path leads too?
Comments
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nice allusion
i like the allusion to frost in this poem. it was cleverly written around the corner.. is mysterious and no one knows -
Thank you I enjoyed reading this. It reminds me of a lesson I learned. Not to judge others, because you never know what's round the corner and, you never know how you will react in the same situation. Others then maybe judging you. It is a poem of hope to me. Thank you SR
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Lovely
This is a beautiful poem and your word choice (diction) is amazing!
I think poetry in the form of emotion like this one can be understood by anyone, but word choice is important, however you are doing fine (I couldn't even tell you were dutch!)
Great write
I really like this one
good luck in the contest =p
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I thought the rhyme was good, and maybe with better meter, equal amount of syllables, or some type of pattern the poem would flow well, and much nicer too.
Besides that, I thought out of all the entries this had the most thought provoking meaning. If you had done this in free verse, I think this would have been my favorite. However, this is my... 3rd favorite (so far) From how it looks, I think you will be through to the next round.
Good luck in the contest.
And thank you for entering.
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We can only take life one day at a time, and travel down that path not knowing what will be around the next bend in the road. Lovely rhythm and rhyme in these lines - great picture as well.
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Every person walks their own paths, sometimes together sometimes alone. That is the beauty of life we just never know what is coming around the corner
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This is a very good read, from my view. I think you did a great job, good luck in the contest.
*Ktulu Blackwolfe* -
thnxs NoWayJo...dutchie you know
I changed it
XXJeannette
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So true babe the words you have written...
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Trying to come by to post comments to other entries while I have some time this afternoon, and yours was the first I came to, Wolf. I like the inspirational nature of this poem...No one knows what is to come day-by-day, but it's only to know by each day to live, love, laugh and learn as best we can.
My only suggestion is the last line of both Stanzas #1 and #6--"So many happens." Did you mean "So much happens" for this line? So many reads a bit awkward, and I don't think the change interferes with the meter of this poem by my reading.
Best wishes to you in the contest!
Jo -
excellent presentation
I love the message in your poem Jeannette. Life is so unpredictable, and we really don't know what is waiting around the corner. I am still following the path.
Good luck in the contest!
Ethereal Melody
p.s.-the picture is beautiful!!
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