A cloud across the blue sky
Journeying north touching the hills along
Raising over it covering the entire firmament
A cool breeze went up from the earth
To welcome the shower from the clouds
The showers fall in glee in little droplets
The earth was filled with sweet fragrance
The freshly washed leaves in joys gay
The granite showed up in red bright
Entire catchments rose from long slumber
With rivulets in a gush rushing
The falls creep along hills
A roaring sound echoed at a distance
The blue river wearing green on its shoulder
Flowed majestically
Taking a bend here and a bend there
Growing bigger and blowing louder
Author notes
Written October 29th, 2006
A contest entry
- a river in the hills- Amunet Wolfbane by PrabhuDayal Khattar.
475 points, ended June 19, 2007, 10 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Nature contest :) by Entwining Beauty.
625 points, ended September 15, 2007, 11 entries
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Very good, I noticed "The showers fall in glee in little droplets" The two 'in's are a little awkward there, but it was a very good poem! Thank you for the entry!
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excellent pen sucj beauty in your words good luck
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a heart touching write indeed...
The blue river wearing green on its shoulder
Flowed majestically
Taking a bend here and a bend there
Growing bigger and blowing louder
Well I just loved its beauty and strength of the gestures shown in the words here..a great work indeed my friend and thank you so much for such a heart touching write...
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Thank you so much for beautiful comments to cherish for a long time to come.
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What a lovely piece this is. It carries such serenity within it. I really enjoyed the journey it took me on
Wonderfully penned!
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Awesome Painting
Love the color,the flow,the peacefull feel of this write...
Could feel the emotions that nature gives in the breeze..
I love the lines:
Raising over it covering the entire firmament
A cool breeze went up from the earth
To welcome the shower from the clouds
The showers fall in glee in little droplets
The earth was filled with sweet fragrance
The freshly washed leaves in joys gay
Strong,yet powerful
Good Job Poet
God Bless
Have a Blessed Day
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Wonderful
i love your words, you form it wonderful and your style is fabulous. I love the painted emotion in this. Great write. I hope to read more of your lovely work. Keep penning.
Tabitha
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Thank you for extremely kind words. I hope to pen more through this portal. encouragement is what keeps me going.
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