I was under the influence
Of sporadic hallucinations
Mending my heart
With stitches of denial
Praying to the FedEx Goddess
To ship me to a
Heroin lullaby dream
Where the numb dominate
The sounds
With kisses
Of a
Moonlight morphine menace
Swallow my memories
I begged of the injector
Fill me with a
Liquid mammoth
Heal my wounds
With salt
There's no pain
Like imagining
The time when
His nails were digging for safety
In the callouses
Of my chipping fingertips
Cooing my sins
Into my deaf ears
There's nothing like love
When you're drowning in
Coffee shop chit-chat
World-wide terror
Editing all of the
Cartoon garden sorrows
Plastic flower tears
Breaking glass butterfly...
Hums her elegy
While crucified by thorns
To a rusty hose
Watering new-born petals
While the doctors pump
Morphine
Nitrogen
Lunacy
Into her gaping mouth
Praying in their mental solitude
Please die soon
Please, please, please
The golf match is starting
And our hands are shaking
My stereotypes are melting
And my creativity dissolving
Deliver me,
Bitter chaos
I'm living a 16th century nightmare
Shattered,
It's all happiness now
When you're so numb
You can't speak
Society-induced coma
Why do the...
Angels get a better view
Of the crumbling difference
Between wrong and right?
And I sit here
Smoothing the ruffles
From my princess gown
Sipping my fairy tales
From my rainbow teacups
Laughing at the universe
Desiring sweet pessimism,
Delusions
Denial
He didn't leave you
Us, me, we
The pupa sings
While I chant...
There's no state like delusion
There's no state like delusion
There's no state like delusion
Author notes
Options :
6. f
Round Here by Counting Crows
The angels get a better view
Of the crumbling difference
between wrong and right
7. Heartbreak
I'm a little insecure about this write. Mainly because it's not my genre. I tried to incoporate parts of my dark society genre into metaphors for heartbreak, delusion, denial, etc. Anyways, it's about overdosing because your significant other, for lack of a better word, leaves you shattered, broken, numb. In my write the drugs are inhancing the denial and bringing delusion and hallucinations to the table. Yeah, hope I helped if anyone didn't get it.
And I hope this is good enough for your contest! <3 Thanks for inviting me!
Written October 29th, 2006
In a list
A contest entry
- This Is NO Ordinary Love... {contest #13} by PerfectImperfection.
300 points, ended November 7, 2006, 26 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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Wow... This is ironic. The poem I just recently wrote has similar metaphors... I didn't realize how like minded you and I are.
Anyway, this piece drips with insanity. It is saturated to the very core. There are so many intensely powerful lines here I hardly no where to begin...
"Mending my heart
With stitches of denial
Praying to the FedEx Goddess
To ship me to a
Heroin lullaby dream"
"There's nothing like love
When you're drowning in
Coffee shop chit-chat"
"Editing all of the
Cartoon garden sorrows
Plastic flower tears
Breaking glass butterfly..."
"And I sit here
Smoothing the ruffles
From my princess gown
Sipping my fairy tales
From my rainbow teacups
Laughing at the universe"
Brilliant images that haunt and linger long after they are seen...
I'm in awe of your talent. So impressed... and jealous. You've captured insanity with your words in a way that I can only dream about.
A beautiful mind tripping write, friend. Thank you for sharing it.
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You know, there are some lines in certain poems of mine that I find pretty hard to believe I wrote.
I don't know if that's arrogant or humble of me but it really does shock me.
I can't remember or even grasp the fact that I wrote...
"Deliver me,
Bitter chaos
I'm living a 16th century nightmare
Shattered,
It's all happiness now
When you're so numb
You can't speak
Society-induced coma
Why do the...
Angels get a better view
Of the crumbling difference
Between wrong and right?"
And I use to not like this poem.
Jeez.
I'm weird.
But thank you so much!
I absolutely love your comments.
I think you're my favorite reviewer as of late. <3
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Wow
Praying to the FedEx Goddess
To ship me to a
Heroin lullaby dream
/how did you think of that, awsome/
drugs aren't good, but this poem was well written, good job at winning gold.
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I had orginally wrote a poem with some of the lines in this but it really sucked so I took some of my favorite lines from it.
FedEx Goddess is such an abstract concept that I just HAD to put it in this. I'm glad you thought it was awesome. And I'm glad you liked it. At first I wasn't too sure about this one but winning gold just took away all of my insecurity about it and I'm starting to really love it. Thanks so much for your comment!
-LT
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Thank you so much for what I fear is the millionth time!
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Indeed!
I know. I had the idea for the write before I started writing but after I finished it and I was reading it over I didn't think that other people would understand it. That's why I explained it in the author's comment. I don't usually do that. I like to leave room for ambiguity. Thank you so much for your comment and I'm glad you enjoyed my write! -
gratz on the gold, the was just awsome as all your writes!
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This is fantastic! Be secure!
I loved it!
Your author's notes didn't add to what I was thinking and I'm glad I didn't read them until after the piece had sunk in. Wow!
The abstract is so delicious - I love it! Delusions see to be the stuff of heartbreak.
I do like how different drugs were brought in. Best of luck in the contest.
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God, you're so kind. This is why I love entering your contests. You give such bloody good comments. I'm very, very flattered. Thank you so much!
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Damn right it's good enough for my contest! I want that dark side of it all... I really like your style - each piece I have read from you has been so far from the norm. You use the unique quality of abstract to add imagery; and not just somethiing plain - something vibrant, uncomfortable, and ready to make it's way into the history books. This was more than amazing to me, and I am very glad you entered! [And I don't blow smoke, at least not up your butt!
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