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Walking Dead

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I gaze no more through arched hues

And hear no whispers sweet

Whirl~winds of hardship, whistle blues

Breezes strong as concrete

A rivalry within my soul

One speaks of death above

The other has some self control

Exhaling breaths of love

Lost within these twisted highways

All dreams of light fade dim

Cast false visions of yesterdays

Singing a hollow hymn

My spirit weeps with unknown tongues

As evil exalts pain

I'd slice out both of my own lungs

So tears won't fall in vain

Peeling me down to the marrow

Each layer you shall see

My life is filled with sorrow

And not so heavenly

Though fragements of fate fall anew

From paths of liquid tears

No-one can ever say what's true

Enveloped in fears

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Don't Ask, I Have No Clue. LOL. Happy Halloween!
Written October 29th, 2006

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  • Asdzaa Nadleehe
    May 13, 2007
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    wow..now that's dark..whoa...excellent write..
    this whole piece gave me chills..
    Peace
    ~M~


  • PoetsAngel
    November 12, 2006
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    mmmmmmm...I truly love a walk on the dark side. This is a wonderful write Timothy.
    My spirit weeps with unknown tongues

    "As evil exalts pain

    I'd slice out both of my own lungs

    So tears won't fall in vain"

    Awe inspiring, this is flawless darkness at it's best, congratulations.

    Cathryn


  • XTiffanyMarieX
    November 3, 2006
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    I love this!!
    Great write.
    <33Tiffany


  • Sacred Ground
    November 2, 2006
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    What a mood you are in, cousin... No, I won't ask! Great write, though, as always. I want to ask... and bad, too! LOL you know it!
    Much Love To You
    LisaMarie


  • wtchr
    November 1, 2006
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    This piece, written outside your norm, gives good account of your gifts as a writer and poet. You are able to draw from within and elicit those same feelings from the reader. Your style 'feels' natural and not forced. Continuity is very good, you complete the thought and the poem. I think your lines of 'peeling down to the marrow' 'for all to see' are quite significant. I feel that you intentionally give us a glimpse of you that we might not otherwise see. Good write, well done


  • SomeoneNobodyLikes
    October 31, 2006
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    great dark piece
    the rhyming was very good and this piece was amazingly well written!
    you have quite a talent here...love the dark write!

    thank you for sharing your work!
    Happy Halloween!

    ~SomeoneNobodyLikes


  • Bullet To The Head
    October 31, 2006
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    wow this was an amazing piece!
    the flow was excellent and the rhyming was perfect!

    these were my favorite lines,

    "Exhaling breaths of love
    Lost within these twisted highways
    All dreams of light fade dim
    Cast false visions of yesterdays"

    --you pinpointed emotions well and made a sick beautiful piece!
    your word usage was very good...i really like this!

    thanks for sharing this with me,
    take care and have a sick halloween!!!

    ♥ Lynn


  • troyias
    October 31, 2006
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    darkness in respite

    Wonderfully sad write....... such a tearing of past reality and present pain. You have cone an excellant Job with this.

    Go with God

    Valerie


  • crystallynnbradford
    October 31, 2006
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    THIS IS PRETTY GOOD. MAYBE YOU SHOULD ENTER IT IN A CONTEST OR SOMETHING...I'D GIVE YOU FIRST PLACE. I LIKE THIS A LOT.


  • Roseleaf
    October 31, 2006
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    deep rivers of pure love

    hi brother Tim enjoyed your scarey piece and will not ask but wonder about..
    I'd slice out both of my own lungs

    So tears won't fall in vain

    Peeling me down to the marrow

    Each layer you shall see

    I hope you have thoughts under there like shrek with the onion and happy ever after never ending
    Or just thinking roses and the layers qhich I believe never never end this is not a trick talking its the treat of Love
    make you blessed this blessed day

    Breathing strongly along

    Love*Light*Peace
    Pauline
    your forever friend


    Edited on Oct 31, 1:58 p.m. because 'tricky keys wow I wonder'.


  • Angels Delight
    October 31, 2006
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    Uncle Tim...

    I am at a loss for words my dear uncle...Like you said don't ask and Happy Halloween...

    You did a simply fantastic job on this one and i applaud you...
    Love you bunches
    as always
    Your niece


  • HisBreathlessDream
    October 30, 2006
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    MMMMMMood dang it!!


  • HisBreathlessDream
    October 30, 2006
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    very awesome sweety... in a bit of a dark ood are we lol. Loves ya big bubba!!!


  • October 30, 2006
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    Strong emotions running wild in this poem...But otherwise wonderfully worded...I can just read the poem and relate so much to it that it is actually scary...You seemed to have phrased everything I couldn't...


    Perfection as it's best...Or need I say more...


  • Desire gold member
    October 30, 2006
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    Magnificent!!


    Now this is surely different but in time for Halloween
    like You mentioned in Your Author's Comments~~

    You did a Magnificent job on this Dark Masterpiece but
    also brought to Light many powerful images~~
    Gives much for the Mind to think about
    Definitely sends shivers down the spine~~

    Keep that smile on ~~
    Know You are Loved and Appreciated!!
    Many blessings to You
    Best wishes too
    and much love~ Desire~*~

  • Poetic Fanatic
    October 30, 2006
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    Gripping!

    Wonderful weaving of poetic words Tim. Great JOB! Happy Halloween to you too. Don't think too spooky or it might
    make you kooky. lol Take care. Best wishes always to you my frind! Keep on penning again and again.

    Tommy


  • Bee gee silver member
    October 30, 2006
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    Aperson deeply sadend

    This poem was nice, but the person seems very sad .It was nicely done.


  • Tadriandurfee gold member
    October 30, 2006
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    Very Good

    Good write. Your line "A rivaly within my soul" seems to create a duality that is subtle but woven through this piece and seems to surface in the last two lines. Was this intentional or am I reading too much into it? Irrespective, this was a good write!


  • King Nothing
    October 30, 2006
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    Wow. I usually write lots on poems like this, but for once, I'm speechless..

    You did us undead a great deal by writing this. (I say us because zombies and vampires are real; I am a vamp myself)!!!

    Like I said, this thing is so wonderful (I think?) that I, for once, can't think of anything to say...

  • BabyIce716
    October 30, 2006
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    its a 9.5 on my ratings

    like the poem, needs a collab on it.
    Like what he is saying, plus it's morbid and I go either way


  • NoWayJo
    October 30, 2006
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    Agree with the others as to this poem in that it is really well-written. It feels to be written of innermost fears, and you've given those intangible fears sensory images that can be felt in the reading.

    Jo


  • real irish rose
    October 30, 2006
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    I read this with music playing in the background and for some reason I got up turned it off and re-read it again.... this is fantastic because I am amazed the way you have described this piece it is like it is your inner most feelings being put on paper, even if it is not based on your feelings it is very good !!
    Well written and as always indeed a pleasure to read xxx


  • Mary O gold member
    October 30, 2006
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    Though leaving me with disturbed yet curious feelings I have to say this is a well written piece. Your images and imotions expressed here are supurb. Emotive piece well done. Take care,
    ~Mary O


  • Elfin
    October 30, 2006
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    wow! I am glad you left us with a happy final word, I thought you were on the brink of suicide lol.
    The desperation spewed from deep down within yourself and formed a very sad piece of work. Well done, you did yourself proud. Val.


  • Nothing but shadows
    October 30, 2006
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    touching

    wow! A great write indeed and alot of people have fwelt that way or at least I have.


  • Lyre-Bird-
    October 30, 2006
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    Great Write

    Great Write!!!! You have penned a good poem, its a really deep emotional dark insight of within one. Reading this I see parts that are relecting back me, I can feel your words with strong emotion. Your title is a real eye catcher, thank you for sharing this poem!!!!
    Tracey

  • Rowan gold member
    October 30, 2006
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    Timothy, you wear your Ap name well..this is a very poetically woven piece. Repentively sad, and beautifully penned.


  • life goes on
    October 30, 2006
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    Lovely, emotional poem with beautifully crafted lines, it seems to speak of a sadness otherwise unspeakable....Isn't it true, that poetry helps us express what mere words can never do???
    This was really moving......Keep up the great work!


  • poeticweaver gold member
    October 29, 2006
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    Thanks!

    I'm glad you understand sis, much love, and thanks for taking the time out to read me, much love to you and yours, Timothy


  • earthstar
    October 29, 2006
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    Excellent

    I am really glad you penned this deep down I know what this means for me. Our lives are not perfect we share sorrows and fears for we all are apart of the human race. I truly love this poem you have done very well. I love it so much it touches my heart I can relate to this write thanks for writing it. I know it was not meant for me it touched my heart thank you lots of love your ap sis brenda I love the way to write and express yourself.


  • poeticweaver gold member
    October 29, 2006
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    Thanks!

    Yea, this is one of those that I really did not want to write, but went ahead and penned it anyway. lol.. Thanks for reading.. ..and I guess even the weaver has his -blank- days.


  • Heavenly Angel silver member
    October 29, 2006
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    Oh my, my love brother! This is beautifully written but also written with a sadness I've never felt from you before!
    Hope all is well with you, sweetie! I love you, dearly!

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