Oh Autumn, how quietly yea creep into the summer,
Dancing merrily among the trees in your garment of many colors.
Though Summer holds her lantern, high among the clouds,
And gives not up easily to your misty shroud.
Resist though she may, surrender she must,
For changes are eternal and her time will come again.
So, weep not for Summer or the falling of the leaves,
For all has it's place, in the face of time.
A contest entry
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What did you think
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This makes me want to sit back in my swing, drink my coffee and just sigh......
The imagery is wonderfully done. Thanks for posting. -
Brilliant!!!
Good luck in this contest!!!
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Lovely dear, with such beautiful metaphor, a gem of a write that you should be proud of.
With much love,
mj.
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A splendid write. This piece is absolute majesty. Very well written, captivating and especially grasping. I particularly enjoyed the lines, “Though Summer holds her lantern, high among the clouds,/And gives not up easily to your misty shroud./Resist though she may, surrender she must,” I really like the personification in this piece, it is most effective. Very sorrowful piece, really placed me into a sort of mourning, but those last three lines are quite powerful, and, I feel, can apply to all change in general; “changes are eternal and her time will come again.” So, though it expresses the depression and sadness of the time, it also reveals the fact that eventually change will come again, and restoration. Sort of gave me the message of the sun will break after the storm, so to speak, I seem to get from this piece. It is very inspirational, tolerant; very beautifully written. Very insightful, well-done write!
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It's really great I can't believe you havn't won more trophies, then what you have i wish you the best of luck in the contest
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I love the message here -
as well as the images you present.
Very vivid, colorful, and wise.
This reminds me of something you'd read in Literature class from one of the classic poets... such as William Blake, Wordsworth, etc...
It has an almost ethereal, other-worldly feel to it (even though it is speaking specifically about the earth and seasons - it's just beyond this time and place in some way I can't explain).
I did enjoy this one quite a bit... and it is growing on me.
Hmmm... leaving me thinking deeply.
This may be a finalist!
Thank you!
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I love the mood of this poem, the imagery is superb. The wording and flow hits the spot for me. Good luck in the contest!
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This is autumn euphoria......
I absolutely LOVE the way this was written.
Oh Autumn, how quietly yea creep into the summer,
Dancing merrily among the trees in your garment of many colors.
Though Summer holds her lantern, high among the clouds,
The personification and metaphor is outstanding here! love the language you used, especially with "how quietly yea creep into summer."
And gives not up easily to your misty shroud.
Resist though she may, surrender she must,
For changes are eternal and her time will come again.
So, weep not for Summer or the falling of the leaves,
For all has it's place, in the face of time.
This is worthy of the gold. For me, it's a toss up between this one and Mercury Rising's American Bald Eagle piece. Fantastic!!!!!! What a delight this was to read!
I love to write about nature. I have no doubt I could learn a ton from your work.
Knight70
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This poem is goregous. A good write.
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Goregous wording. This is short and it is penned on one of my favorite subjects. Good luck,
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reminds me of a fairy tale. very mystical. i think you meant "eternal." wonderful ode to the seasons.
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i have to complement you and your wonderful background. the colors of the font is simply wonderful as well. well-written poem- very vivid and beautiful.
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Thank you very much for entering this contest. I may add much more of a comment later on since there are so many other submissions.
You may want to keep in mind that I will try to open more of the same contests one after another if I can earn enough feedback to do so which I must say would be truly appreciated. Altogether, I hope this will also give everybody a glimpse at one of you're favorite accomplishments which hopefully in turn inspire them to look at what else you've got. -
V.Good
Your poem is very vibrant in it’s colourful world that describes both symbolic and physical aspects of change and progression.
In seed time learn, in harvest teach, in winter enjoy.
William Blake (1757 - 1827)
As Blake indicates each season also has its traditional values, not that the modern world and its rate of change allow too much to remain. One aspect is the seasons, which use to be constant but also no more; a sad realisation of you poem could be that time is out of shift and nature in array; it could possibly make your poem more poignant.
V.Good
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this is sooooooo good !! awesome and wonderful !! i just loved this !! every detail was so well explained and the rhyming rocked !!
Though Summer holds her lantern, high among the clouds,
And gives not up easily to your misty shroud.
Resist though she may, surrender she must,
For changes are eternally and her time will come again(my fav lines )
thank you so muhc for entering and best wishes in the contest ,
your well wisher ,
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Thanks for the Honorable Mention in this contest. I deeply appreciated being #4, behind such great entries as the winners were. Thanks again.
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Great poem. Thank you for entering.
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Such a beautiful write so full of imagery. I so loved it. Good luck in my contest
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I loved how you gave each component of the four seasons different human characterizes and that it flowed so nicely. Great Job and best of luck to you in the contest.
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Some very nice imagery you've got going on here. Thanks for entering and good luck.
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The imagery in your poem is so poignant, I really loved it =)
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Thank you for your kind comments.
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You've put some very nice imagery and word choice into this poem and it flows quite well. I especially like the ending. It makes it much more than just a simple description of a season. Thanks for entering and good luck.
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Thank you so much for your kind review.
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wonderful write. good luck!
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I like this, I like 'creep into the summer' and 'summer holds her lantern' Thanks for entering!
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AWESOME
A BEAUTIFUL PRESENTATION OF TRH CHANGING SEASONS YOU HAVE PAINTED HERE WITH YOUR AWESOME WORDS. I SO ENJOYED READING AND REVIEWING THE PIECE FOR YOU. VERY DESCRIPTIVE PIECE! YOU KEEP ON PENNING AND MAY GOD BLESS!
POETDONTKNOWIT
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I liked the imagery you used to describe autumn and summer and I enjoyed reading this! Great write.
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Autumm
Really a powerful write....the way, the discription has been given and especially the power of speech and expression so used really made it different from others...usage of a little old language will make it come out quite more beautifully!
If there were sp, pls forgive and ignore...thanks!
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Fantastic.
This is very nicely expressed I like the sens of acceptance within it. This is what i enjoyed best
"Dancing merrily among the trees in your garment of many colors" the end is so encouraging in a way so full of wisdom. Doomday.
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Such a fantastic write. You have great descriptive talent, continue your great work.
Dancing merrily among the trees in your garment of many colors
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A wonderful autumn poem! This was a real pleasure to read! I would like to welcome you to allpoetry! I hope you enjoy it here!
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Welcome to AP first of all and I hope to read more from you in the future. I loved this poem. The vivid images flowed from your golden pen and painted abeautiful work of art. Continue your great work.
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out of all the changes of the seasons summer to autum is the one that grips[shocks] me the most...thank you
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very true. change comes to all things.I love autumn and i love this poem
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