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The mirror

In my brand new stripey jumper-

with a paisley pattern shirt underneath;

slip on shoes that feel like slippers,

i'm so comfy

clean and sure of myself.


I feel like i'm a peacock-

strutting 'round the living room on my own;

i snort my last line from the mirror,

and light a fag up

on my way to the pub.


I'm feeling so fantastic-

my insecurities have vanished once more;

they won't come back until tomorrow,

so i'll enjoy myself

until they return.


In the nightclub,  eyes are on me-

all the girls are really digging my moves;

throwing shapes across the dancefloor,

i feel so sexy

i'm the cock of the north.


It's back to mine after the lock in-

half the town invades my house for a smoke;

music blasts through open windows,

people stagger

'round as if in a trance.


But now the fear and dread's upon us-
as people filter from my flat one by one;

it seems like everything's decaying,

melancholy

now replaces the joy.


As my curtains catch the sunlight-

i can see that i'm alone in the room; 

all i'm left with is the mirror,


a smudged reminder

of the damage that's done.


Author notes

a mirror is commonly used to cut speed and cocaine on.
Written October 29th, 2006

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  • Ignis Corpus
    July 18, 2007

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    this is a good piece, and i see how you incorporated a mirror in this piece only a few could see this, most people would think a razor is used, but not all the time.. good job and best of luck in this contest


  • acidnwonderland
    March 23, 2007

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    I am really not feeling it.. I understand what the mirror's used for; whatever. But it's still not very drug like.


  • AnnD Moderators member
    January 27, 2007

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    A very sad and poignant post. Such is the lonely life of a user, pretending to the world and themselves until reality checks in once more.
    well penned.

    Ann


  • galfalfa gold member
    January 4, 2007

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    I'm so sick i started off giggling at this with your stripey jumper and paisley pattern shirt The mirror reflects truth back at us in more ways then one....a day in the life of a addict when he comes down from his high...alone with his mirror. You've done a superb job here with this,

    Bravo!

    galfalfa




  • ICULookn
    October 29, 2006
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    "The Mirror" title captured my eye i nthe featured box. As i clicked it and set upon the reading again i was more so capturesd with your way with words and the imagery displayed within your poem. GRAET title well and cool o nthe background selection.. bless
    Iculookn


  • sickasaurusrex
    October 29, 2006
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    the mention of a mirror as its druggie's use and as a mocking reflection of the horrible life he's leading is great. very, very good read.


  • paperparadox silver member
    October 29, 2006
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    A very lonely poem, this. Even during the frenzy of the disco, I still felt the chill of loneliness. Is it the curse of our youth to feel this way? I know I certainly did at one time.

    Just a few tweaks that I'd like to suggest:

    3rd stanza, 2nd line: 'insecurities' (you have insecurity's)
    4th stanza, 4th line: 'crowds' (not crowd's)
    5th stanza: ...does music fly? Maybe 'thuds', or 'pulses'?

    Lovely idea for a thought-provoking poem. Well done.

  • Cinnarry gold member
    October 29, 2006
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    Very honest and raw emotional piece you've written here. I love the descending order of the stanzas as they come to the solitude. Well done and thank you for sharing this


  • Inside and out
    October 29, 2006
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    Alex, you have done it again. A clever and creative piece that is gripping. Wonderfully written my friend.


  • pixxiepoetess
    October 29, 2006
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    I really like the way you brought us back to the mirror at the end of the poem. It really help makes the piece cohesive. I'm sure you'll do great in the contest. This is a great piece. --->pixxie<---


  • LadyUnique silver member
    October 29, 2006
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    this was me at one time. you've hit bone with this write.
    coke, speed, pot and booze all made for a great party girl... and i also brought the 'troops' home with me. more drinking, smoking and line after line. come about three or four in the morning almost everyone would be gone. then panic set in.
    i quit all this over 15 years ago but even to this day if i stay up till wee morning hours i panic and it's not pretty.
    the last stanza says it all for me. you put me right back into that life, that's how good your writing is you went from the high of anticipation to the stark loneliness and guilt of 'after'.
    i'm impressed


  • Roseleaf
    October 29, 2006
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    enjoyed this

    Your name caught my eye I wondered why and then caught by your poem and its really great and all of us can relate to being somewhere simular to that in our lifes when we were young and like to party up abit It took me to many a party I have been to and think of those old friends and wonder there and what they are doing hoping not caught in a place that you describle now I am talking about many moons back anyway thanks for making it possible to read this by featuring it and great luck in the con its already a winner to me
    Keep writing and enjoying your gift to share with us all

    Love * Light
    Pauline


  • sarajaneUK
    October 29, 2006
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    wow Alex, this is excellent. i love a write that gives me goosebumps, and this did just that. Great stuff. Guess we all have mirrors of regret, i know for sure i do.

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