We had our perfect ending on the way.
We figured we'd be together forever,
so why did you say those things that day?
That night my world came crashing down.
Because suddenly you said we were only temporary,
I fought back my tears as we left town.
For Days I cried all through the night.
How could you just give up all we had?
Just leave without a fight.
Then I just gave up and took the blame.
We were happy again,
But it just wasn't the same.
Everything you said seemed like lies.
The love that I once saw,
Has been erased from your eyes.
I don't know what I can say.
This just hurts too much,
I don't love you like I did yesterday.
Author notes
This is probably one of the worst poems I have...
Honestly, I was just too upset to take my time on it.
I think I'll fix it up soon and make it worth something...
Written October 28th, 2006
A contest entry
- Still Searching for the Black Parade? by shatteredremains.
350 points, ended November 7, 2006, 8 entries
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its good...i like it...has plenty of emotion seeping between each word i read....again i love it, like it, whatever....its a great write...
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wow...this is really good...i liked it a lot...it explains a lot about the love one person has for another yet the other doesn't love you back...great job. -
i like it a lot of course. teehee had to get the matches in there too i see. it's pretty much exactly what happened though that night so you can't say it sucks cause it's all completely true! you're coming over soon haha.
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I think that the fact that this poem's not perfect helps get across the emotion in it. If you think it through to much then you lose that feeling. A+
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