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Autumn

Stark branches illuminate; along
The path evening begins to settle.
Discrepancies of cloud and sky.
Bulbous moon.  Stars hidden
By remnants of day.  Memory's tender
Possessions lure me---comfort against
The elements.  You offered a proper
Goodbye; you might return
One day at destiny's discretion.
I understand.

A dream token prayed for, delivered
As a gift.  Nightbird's bold warble calms.
My fierce intent unquestionable; the
Burning within indomitable.
The chill wind can't deter me.
Rock face!  Rock face!

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Written October 28th, 2006

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  • mjseattle silver member
    November 2, 2006
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    Thank you so much for reading my poem and leaving such an encouraging comment. It is most appreciated. Thanks again. ~Mark


  • Poet of the heart 2
    November 2, 2006
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    Wow, this was a different kind of poem I have read today. But you know what? You have done a great job writing this poem and you have also chose the right words to use. Way to go- keep up your good work and never let anybody ever tell you that you cannot write- because you can and this poem has showed that you could... I wish I could give you an applaud for this poem but I ran out of them and also I am trying to save up enough points too run a contest sometime next week. I am 20 points away. But once I do have one running I would really love it if you were to enter- I love the way you write.
    Jynnette


  • panegyric ink
    October 29, 2006
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    i lovethoutdoorsinthisone!

    I Love the way your thoughts really, really come together!!! This is really great!!! Write On!


  • Mountain of Light
    October 28, 2006
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    Amazing, amazing poem! I am partial to the sentiments sometimes connected to this time of year You've painted a beautiful physical AND mental tableau... I related very much to what you've expressed.


  • vivela silver member
    October 28, 2006
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    I love this poem. Everything about it. You move dramatically from the outside world to your inner one so skillfully!! Warm Regards...vivela
    Edited on Oct 28, 9:28 p.m. because ''.


  • Sle3p
    October 28, 2006
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    Awesome poem,It was very discriptive keep up the good work.


  • Kari gold member
    October 28, 2006
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    deep

    This has got to be one of the best pieces I've read about Autumn Very well done in it. I loved it and it was deep.
    Thanks for sharing.

    Kari


  • Cupcrazy gold member
    October 28, 2006
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    Wonderful piece , loved the form and flow an the imagry was awesome. very nice piece from start to finish. Keep your pen forever flowing Bunny

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