Nobody ever...
Nobody ever told her how precious she was
Nobody dared looking into her eyes…
All they knew is how much pain she had caused
All they ever thought of were those stupid lies…
And once again she sits in candlelight
Wishing for the fire to swallow her too
And once again she knows the tears she cries
‘Cause they were all
She ever knew
Moments gone by would still come back
And find her even in the farthest place
Where could she hide and not be attacked?
Useless now - her chiffon dress and pretty lace
And once again she sits in candlelight
Wishing for the fire to swallow her too
And once again she knows the tears she cries
‘Cause they were all
She ever knew
“Quiet down, please be calm”, she tells her heart tonight
“It won’t be long - we shall be freed and brave”
And for the last time, she visits his grave
Before lying down…
And going to sleep by his side.
Author notes
Name: Aureola
Other Poem: Some things...
A contest entry
- Tales Of Loss by peregrin.
450 points, ended October 1, 2008, 38 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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WOW! You hooked me in here with this poem. Really a captivating write. Scenes from graveyards are among my favorites.
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This is a fantastic write, I read it over and over. It is well written, and very fantastic.
Love it!
um... paints a great picture. A GREAT picture. So vivid.
Magical!
Anyways,
love it!
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Very interesting. But...whose side are we talking about here? Her lover's side, or what? Now that I think about it, you could turn this poem into a story. *cough cough* More please!
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its great. im the same way dont write for months and then it just pours out.
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great!
I loved this hun, especially the 'chorus' part, and the different structure to it. Loads of emotion in this, you did well!
Rosie x -
FANTASTIC!
that was absolutely fantastic! i may be male...but i understand completely what you are saying...reminds me of me...i have ruined so much...now i wish that i could take everything that has happened to me...all the pain and suffering i have caused...and just make it disappear, i have hurt so many...so many have hurt me...but all in all...i have hurt myself more than all...i congradulate you on your new write and i hope that you continue to write... -
its really well imagined much real i liked alot i liked the emotions you put in it and about ending it was absolutely fantastic
i also love to write from emotions and from thinkings bcz its the real poetry bcz it tells us alot
well i hope you won't stop writing again for a long time
good luck and keep up the good work
by
the poet of hearts and beautiful words -
Very emotional and lonely write. I'm glad you have began writing again, it serves me as wonderful therapy. Good job!!!
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Hey, wow. This is such a fantastic and emotional write. I love it. Its an awsome piece!! WOOT!!!
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I was worried her chiffon dress was going to catch on fire.
This is a dramatic and emotional poem that ends in such a surprising way. I am glad you wrote a poem after so long! 
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Amazing Write!
wow..this is great....actually this is more than great its AMAZING! You have come back strong. I had writers block for about 3 months and I still aint wrote anything this good!! Keep up the good work!!!
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THIS IS AMAZING!! i thought i was the only one who got writers block for that long, but u bounced back beautifully!!
**Megan -
Oh, so bittersweet, to join him in death. You have written this poem with great depth of emotion, and done an excellent job!
Smooshes,
Moonshine Pixie -
Wow, I totally agree... Fantastic! I can't believe that this is completely made up because it was so... great
(lack of a better word 
)
sorry I can't write anything else... *yawns* It's too late you know!
Good night!
*~Annie~*
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“Quiet down, please be calm”, she tells her heart tonight
“It won’t be long - we shall be freed and brave”
And for the last time, she visits his grave
Before lying down…
And going to sleep by his side."
well done i enjoyed this immensely...lovely poem dear...
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WOW!!!!!!!!!! The emotion in this is fantastic! I love it! Great job!!!!!!! Keep that pen flowing!
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This is awesome!!! I love the lines
"And once again she sits in candlelight
Wishing for the fire to swallow her too
And once again she knows the tears she cries
‘Cause they were all
She ever knew"
It's amazing. Great job! -
wow...i'm stunned. really! i just don't know what to say about except it is just great!
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