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my future

a man standing alone
lighting a cigarette of empty lies
wishing his life was different
wanting a purpose
a life torn to pieces
by his lose of love
never knowing that leisure
never having joy

wondering the streets
soaked in the rain
blowing out his money
and burning more
lighting another after another
burning more and more until my wallet starts to burn
nothing maters to him
his walks alone
but his habit makes him feel happy
each time he inhales
he dies more
even though he's already dead.

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Written October 28th, 2006

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  • Goodolenad
    January 19, 2007
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    a, if this is you, i can see you as a writer.

    this is great. nice write.


  • forgotten voice
    October 28, 2006
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    wow that was really good i loved it