Burn the haunting image stitched upon her naked eyes-
emblazoned photographs of cyanide curl and whisp away,
whisp away...
The footsteps wander ever nearer,
the soft scritch-scratch on the doors to her mind
growing ever louder, ever fainter-
is someone even there?
Say goodbye to the insolent daughter,
a failure wrapped in shrouds of lies,
hate,
deceit,
defecation,
deprivation,
of stability,
of her sanity, trapped in a bell jar
suffocating;
on the smoke in forms of demons in her daydreams.
It may seem that all she needs
is to wake up from this reality,
so hard she deems this task of living,
of existing,
in a realm of subtle cruelty.
Forgive her, she begs,
for the inability-
the inability to survive.
A contest entry
- Word Bank ~ Titles ~ Picture Inspiration ~ Pre-Write's by blondone.
600 points, ended May 21, 2007, 21 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Teenage by Lj-.
300 points, ended May 30, 2007, 37 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Sadness and Darkness by My Darkness.
600 points, ended June 26, 2007, 31 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Turn those greenies into gold (or silver or bronze) pt 7 by whispernthedark.
700 points, ended October 11, 2008, 25 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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This is a wonderful poem. I'm really sorry but the rules for this contest is that your poem can have only won an honorable mention. Since you have a silver trophy for this it is not eligible. Great write though, I'm so glad I got to read it. Thank you.
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whisper
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woww, that was really stupid of me wasn't it? >_< i understand. thanks for liking it though, it means a lot :]
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I found this to be absolutely stunning. The powerful emotions...the anger and despair just jumped on me and wouldnt let go. Excellent writing my friend
Roses
Raker
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thank you dearly.
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i love the words bell jar.. remind me of sylvia plath, she is amazing.. this is a great write, strong and full of sadness, congrats on the trophies.. thanks for entering and good luck
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I like it.
Line eleven:
"defacation" should be "defecation"
Thank you for entering,
Good luck!
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gahh! thank you.i fixed the conniving bleeper.
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No problem
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taking a second peek
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this is wonderful and tell the truth about depression love the flow and the form even though I've not seen it before it sure works with these words you have written thank you for this entry
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My god. What an amazing poem. I love the ending line, it gave me chills. It was written beautifully. Wonderful job.
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Wow! I agree wutg grannyeri! This is so tragic! This is such a sad poem, but it has been written so beautifully! Well done! I love the title by the way. Fantastic.
Goodluck
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wow a very powerful piece, i can relate to it, and i think you were very descriptive, so you get a big thumbs up from me. Good job i look forward to reading more of your work.
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Very tragic this situation you write about in these lines - how sad to feel this way and to want to die - very free verse, no rhyme and so sad. Love the alliteration in the title and throughout the poem.
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