You know that love is written like a book
But I ripped out our pages of happy-ever-after
As I painted it on my skin, and you on yours
And did we ever read it? Did we ever mean it?
Cause 'I love you' is like a slip of the tongue
But the music is too loud to shout over
As we cling to each other in the nightclub throng
Did we ever need this? Did we ever want it?
And we've got another lifetime to learn
We've got another lifetime to yearn,
But we'd probably just crash and burn,
We'd probably just crash and burn.
We keep the faith, by telling ourselves
'God's just sleeping'
Telling ourselves,
'God sees us weeping'
And we're made to smile, but we end up screaming.
Author notes
I don't really know. I just started writing. I haven't been able to write anything so I'm a bit excited, I know it's not really that great but it's something.
I'm thinking about putting music to it, so lyrics maybe.
I really want your opinion
Written October 27th, 2006
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Wow, it's been so fucking long since I've read anything by you. I miss it-you.
Loved these lines:
"Telling ourselves,
'God sees us weeping"
Good job, sweets.
I wish you'd write something new though, let me know your insides are still alive.
-Allura -
'And we're made to smile, but we end up screaming.' -
that is so hard hitting.
my opinion: this is a great piece of writing.
i love the repetition. -
"pages of happy-ever-after" ... oh yes indeed...
i love this sweetie, not ure best, but i thought of it like a song and i rekon it would be enchanting... gorgous poem, glad to see you writing again my love.
"And we're made to smile, but we end up screaming." - thats awesome, idk why but it was kindda scary, a twisted smile and a distant scream...
fucked up sorry.
i looveyou x -
Beautiful.
beautiful as always
Loved these lines the most"
You know that love is written like a book
But I ripped out our pages of happy-ever-after
As I painted it on my skin, and you on yours
And did we ever read it? Did we ever mean it?
Cause 'I love you' is like a slip of the tongue
But the music is too loud to shout over
As we cling to each other in the nightclub throng
Did we ever need this? Did we ever want it?" -
You already know my opinion. This is great. Everything you write is great.
"Cause 'I love you' is like a slip of the tongue
But the music is too loud to shout over
As we cling to each other in the nightclub throng
Did we ever need this? Did we ever want it?
And we've got another lifetime to learn
We've got another lifetime to yearn,
But we'd probably just crash and burn,
We'd probably just crash and burn."
That part really spoke to me. You're work never stops amazing me Becca.
~Mia
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