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Fallen -- cinquain

Fallen
Eve, holding fruit.
Enticing him to taste,
From Eden’s dispassionate world,
Released!

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I can't seem to quit writing poems from the survivor challenges.  
Written May 2nd, 2003

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  • Leance
    May 25, 2003
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    Great cinquain.........such depth lies within it.........
    I really like this.......'Enticing Him To Taste........we us women.......we are so bad..........lol........thanks for comment on 'Yourself You Give To Me'.......I used to be afraid to write erotic pieces and now they just won't stop......as long as everyone enjoys them I will continue......thanks again.....
    lisa anne


  • AndrewHide silver member
    May 7, 2003
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    Adam,
    remains a fool,
    tasting forbidden fruit,
    offered by the one that he loved,
    and falls.

    You really have got the knack of the cinquain now, this flowed well and was very complete and all within it's strict form.


    Andrew