When summer ends her glorious colour bright,
the song of birds not heard at morning's dawn.
The fields are ploughed and shimmer in soft light,
little drops of dew covering mowed lawn.
All shades are dimmed to orange and dark brown,
the lambs have grown into their adulthood.
Maple trees proudly sport a golden crown,
those signs can never be misunderstood.
When sun sets in a flaming red farewell,
we know the change of seasons is right there.
That Autumn is about to cast its spell
and nature has a different tune to share.
Autumn's magestic, coloured skies unfold,
with each season, we're slowly growing old.
Author notes
Option 2. John Keats - Ode to Authumn - I've choosen the Sonnet form.
Written October 26th, 2006
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- October Old Poets Birthdays by Old Poetry.
475 points, ended November 10, 2006, 7 entries
Gold trophy winner
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What did you think
Comments
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A terrific poem that would have graced any contest. and within an ace of picking up a trophy.
Please keep entering the other rounds, love is already underway.
Thanks for your entry we both enjoyed reading it
Jeff and Sue
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Other than the inverted lines ...
this isn't bad. Here:
And maple trees wear proudly their gold crown
would read more like English is you did this:
maple trees proudly sport a golden crown
Line 13 is also an inverted line, but I am not sure how you'd fix it. It's not so blatantly obvious that it makes me cringe, but it's definitely obvious.
Anyway, mostly this is a good poem.
Thanks for entering.
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Thanks, I've changed line 13, maybe it's better now. Never knew that 'sport' also means 'showing off'.
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This is better ...
I have to congratulate you on a pretty good job. -
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Thank you for the green, which actually is my favorite colour LOL
It was a pleasure to participate in your contest and when you pull another one, just let me know and I'll try again.
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rthyme is good, sonnet form is grand, story told held me from beginning to end
I liked this poem and enjoyed myself with it
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I read this and loved it very much I want you to know that. Form is perfect and this is a excellent poem.
The wrose thing about this poem is the content has been written about seven billion times. That being said I still enjoyed it and would probably enjoy this poem if I read it another seven million times.
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This poem is so beautiful written. Autumn is a great season. The beauty of changing leaves is beautiful.
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And now I see why you didn't keep this one in, you added your other one. Didn't see that right away.
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AUGH, a shakespearean sonnet... in iambic pentameter, with perfect rhymes, great flow and near perfect rhythm (last line one too many syllables) and you added it and then REMOVED it from my contest, the perfect poem???? AAAAAAAAAAA I wish that half the people who entered my contest were this talented!
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WOW, Gold!
Thank you very much for the gold, that was quite a surprise. I love sonnets and sometimes I manage to get them right LOL -
Renee, I'm blushing here, thank you for your compliment and lovely comment. I like every season, but Summer the least (can't stand the heat). Every season has its own beauty and colour and as I'm living in the midst of nature it's almost like looking at a lifetime movie, it never bores. In Autumn and Winter the sun is setting right in front of my house. If you wish you could take a peek at my photos here www.pbase.com/lookheretitia and then you see what I'm talking about.
Normally a Sonnet is written in iambic pentameter, but sometimes I miss one too. All lines should read 5 times da-dum and it helpes when reading loud to tap the rythm with your foot. ~Titia~ -
What a beautiful ode. Autumn is my favorite time of the year. It seems that the seasons come and go so fast these days. I am surely aging with the times. This is an exquisite sonnet. I felt the iambic pentameter here. I have a difficult time writing a sonnet but it is always a joy to read one, especially when it is lyrical and as beautiful as this. You paint a very lovely picture with pen. I am so soothed after reading this. A delight!
I wish you the very best with this OP challenge, and thank you for your portion, and support.
Much Love ♥
Renee
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Thank you Jim for your commment. Glad you liked it.
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A fine poem.
Thank you for entering it here.
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Thank you Eusebius for calling my sonnet 'deftly done'. I peeked at your poetry and coming from you this compliment means much to me. I really like to write sonnets, but I'm bound to a rather simple vocabulary, because English is not my native language and therefor I'm lacking a great deal of synonyms, which one normally has in one's own language.~Titia~
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Bravo!
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Yes, Autumn is special, though I like all seasons and living in open country with nature as my front- and backyard, it's a joy to see the seasons change. ~Titia~
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www.oldpoetry.com/opoem/4333-John-Keats-Ode-To-Autumn
My most favourite season of all is Autumn and allthough I live in the Tropics of Australia I do relate to the colours your writing brought back to me - my memories of England.
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Hi Anna, thanks for your comment. The picture is the view from my front window. Every winter the sun goes under right in front of our house, beautiful sunsets to admire. ~Titia~
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This is a splendidly written poem. I enjoyed every word of it. Combined with this beautiful picture it created the only right atmosphere. I love it. Very well done JustADutchie. My compliments. Anna - another Dutchie
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