My world is being shattered,
My thoughts chipped apart piece by piece,
Things that to me once mattered,
Are slowly slipping away,
My world has been invaded,
My own little fantasy land,
Where behind I could leave reality,
Because reality claws at me,
A monster threatening to overwhelm,
To throw me into a pit I cannot leave,
Where only a glimmer of hope can be seen,
Where only faintly do I realize,
That reality was once not so cruel,
And maybe I can change it back to how it was,
But I have not the strength to win,
For my fantasy is no longer whole,
Attacked by the cruelty of the world,
Overtaken by frustration and hopelessness,
The darkness of ignorance has blackened the sky,
And no longer can I separate my fantasy from reality,
For they are suddenly the same,
And I cannot fight them both,
Reality has won, and fantasy is no more...
Author notes
Hehe. This was something that just kind of jumped into my head. (I was a bit mad...and frustrated, and annoyed with my mom, and school, and a certain situation with a certain redhead...) I guess I was just thinking about how reality seems out to get me right now. So, TA DA!, my frustration and anger and annoyance became a poem!
~Lyz~
Written October 26th, 2006
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dis wuz just all in all
lovely and pretty much
are my feeling now thank
you so much i loved the poem
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Hm it was alright, not exactly breath taking or awe inspiring, but it was generally well written and easy to follow
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This was actually too long for my liking. Although I like most poems in this format, I thought this just repeated things too much, in a not-very-effective sort of way. It would have been much better if you had left this at about 10 lines, and let your emotion and anger and frustration come through in a short poem and leave a lasting impression than this longer poem and leave the reader a bit dissapointed at the oversuage of words.
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lol. you got it right Lynnperson(although it refers to more than one thing). but yeah, if you're thinking the same thing I'm thinking (which you most likely are considering we're thirds and all) then, no I'm not confused.
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Amazing write Lyzperson. I'm going to guess this is your most serious poem in a long time. Drastic times call for a change in writing...er, something like that. :roll: Anyway, I liked it. It deals with reality, and reality bites. Hard. That line, "the darkness of ignorance bites the sky" ...is that what I'm thinking it's referencing to? Or no? Or am I just overthinking things? Or am I really just out to confuse you right now? Agh, I mess myself up. I'll leave you alone now.
~crazed persona
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