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Baby Steps

A small, young girl

So timid & weak

Lost and alone

Unable to speak


Afraid of the past

Still hiding today

Falls to her knees

Beginning to pray


For an inkling of hope

To carry her through

Within her own heart

She must be true


With baby steps

So carefully

She'll make the choice

Of who she must be


Holding on tight

Never letting go

Spreading her wings

And learning to grow

Author notes

A simple write that has huge meaning to me.
Written October 26th, 2006

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  • Scars-On-Her-Arms
    November 24
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    WOW!!!

    "for an inkling of hope
    to carry her through
    within her own heart
    she must be true"

    that is fucking deep...


  • EternalTorment
    July 28

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    So powerful. I can relate to this very much.
    I'm now 20 and yet I still feel like a timid child. Unsure of the future, because of the past.
    Excellent writing!


  • daviscth silver member
    March 24, 2008

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    This is such a wonderful poem. It's filled with so much promise and love and really made me feel good just reading it. I love the butterflies. They were a great choice to go with it.


  • Thunder Child
    January 20, 2008
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    wow


  • MissWings
    May 7, 2007
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    Awsome, baby steps are set in stone, cant be undone cant be unlearned. Well done xxx


  • SummerlandRayne gold member
    January 24, 2007

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    How Lovely!

    This poem was so easy to read, the verses fell into place so well. I loved the theme and the last verse where she found the courage to spread her wings and fly!
    Blessings,
    Azlyn


  • crivanea silver member
    December 17, 2006

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    i agree..simple..but too true..i think it is a lovely piece..one everyone can relate to, the content is definetly a mature and truthful aspect toward life..good job..i enjoyed the read


  • im-a-sparkley -elf
    October 27, 2006
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    For a short poem with short lines, i can feel the intense depth and meaning that comes with it, You did a fabulosu jbo with this.


  • Your Messiah
    October 27, 2006
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    This is really sweet, Jennyboo. I'm very glad to see you writing again. =] I liked the simplicity and I liked how the rhyming flowed well.

    I thought this line "Of who she must be" was a bit too long for the line it rhymed with.

    I also would have preffred a little more imagery.

    I hope this gave you some release. =]

    Love you, Jennyboo.

    -Cory
    .x
    Edited on Oct 27, 6:22 because ''.

  • Spork the Mighty
    October 26, 2006
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    It is "Simple" but really deep as well....Better than my new one. LOL. Jeen, I haven't heard from you in forever....miss you....

  • Dark Raspberry Fizz
    October 26, 2006
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    wow i likw this keep it up

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