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The moon and the nightingale

Azure fantasy in soft flowing shrouds,

dances in forests with translucent  clouds.
A ballet on boughs, upon tippy-toe,
swaying with breezes as air currents flow.

Silently tracing the moon's lustrous bands,
halos were touched and caressed with my hands.
A feel of weightlessness fills up my mind,
portraits so beautious, seen by the blind.

The moon and nightingale whisper a song,
they alone know it, yet I hum along.
Keeping in sync with the birds and the bees,
and all the critters who live with the trees.

Gooseberry flowers with pinkish flushed bloom,
bursts open, releasing, springtime's perfume.
High on a limb the owl watches and swoons,
as gooseberry’s scent, is roped by the moon.

Dewdroping kisses were forming in drips,
a refreshing bath that dampened my lips.
A liquid elixir drank by the gods,
how lucky was I and what were the odds?

There... caught on a web, the moon as a prize,
a spider just can’t, believe his own eyes.
I’m sure that he thought he’d caught a great meal,
he will be sad when he finds it’s unreal.

While in a forest just open your mind,
be sharp and alert and always be kind.
Treasures you’ll find there far deep in the woods,
could last forever and very well should.

 

~*~



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Written October 25th, 2006

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  • catz Moderators member
    April 12, 2008

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    This very beautiful, Sis, filled with the love and appreciation of nature. The last stanza is my favorite... it sums it all up beautifully. Good luck in the contest


    Dee


  • wingsofgold25 silver member
    April 10, 2008

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    Very nice and realy a good write.It brought back so many memories of the many times I had taken a stroll in the forest.
    Along the trail of the Lonesome Pine.
    Good Luck in the contest.


  • Ephiphany
    April 1, 2008
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    Absolutely beautiful

    amazingly penned. Thank you so much for your entry...
    e


  • Frodofan silver member
    April 5, 2007

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    YOU'VE BEEN HOOD-WINKED!

    A very beautiful piece. Been a long time since I've read a decent nature poem and this is much more than decent. I could envision it all. Now I REALLY want to go hiking. A beautiful flow of words and images. Keep writing.


    • FifthDove
      April 5, 2007
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      Thank you so very much for your lovely cmment and applause, I appreciate it very muchDove*


  • Kari gold member
    December 2, 2006

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    I've already commented on this before so you know how I feel!
    The very best of luck to you in the contest.
    Kari


  • wakingdevil
    November 9, 2006
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    Wonderful imagery depicting the five senses extremely well.Brilliantly structured and well worded along with beautiful rhyming and a sweet flow Thanks for entering and best of luck


  • Cynt
    November 1, 2006
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    captivating

    wonderful, so detailed and great description of the scenery!


  • ma belle
    October 26, 2006
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    Beautiful forest theater. The poetry and presentation simply a delight. I loved its elixir and the gooseberry scent was enchanting. All my best, Belle


  • DJ Harley silver member
    October 26, 2006
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    very nice poem dove, well written, i love being in the forest, I grew up in the tonto National Forest, in AZ


    good luck in the contest

    John


  • Smirnoff Ice
    October 26, 2006
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    This is so well written and so full of vivid imiagary.all the best for the contest though i am sure you wont need it!An excellent piece


  • maa gold member
    October 26, 2006
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    dearest cindy dove,
    I have seen this wonderful photograph featured in one of your recent contests and admired its grace and beauty. now, your words give life to the image and reveal the simple yet extremely blissful experiences we can witness when walking silently and attentively through a forest.
    your imagery is a feast for the senses and nourishes at the same time the silent and peaceful dimension of peace within our souls.
    thank you so much for such a gift,
    all the best to you,

    maa


  • Legend silver member
    October 26, 2006
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    I am slowly running out of any sort of comments in this contest Each time i read a piece I think this is the best I have read so far only to be blown away by the next one I click onto.Once more this is the case I could go on about the rhyme flow meter but what the heck I just love it enough said Good luck in the contest


  • DK akaLunaticSerene gold member
    October 25, 2006
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    So lovely!! this felt like a mystic lulaby! the spider captures the moon in it's web, that is so amazing! And now I really want to know what gooseberry blossoms smell like! U nailed this darlin! Woot woot!

    xxoo
    dk


  • capricornpoet
    October 25, 2006
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    captured nature and its dream illusions

    You must have been in that forest watching the halos round the moon, saw a spider whose web in sat on..
    Words poetic ran here,at first I thought,,Wordsworth, then
    Keats..for you have captured them here, in their romance and
    forlorne way, but your style shows here, cradling , soft,
    touching the edge of the soul...
    Lovely and dreamy...rhymes gentle and smooth..
    (fantasies......first line word..
    Gorgeous...i'd suggest something softer...(beautious)
    You could tweak this into a classic ...love were its going...


  • Huntress silver member
    October 25, 2006
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    You go girl, you got some real skills with your pen. Good luck in the contest


  • Cupcrazy gold member
    October 25, 2006
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    Wonderful piece Dove. beautiful imagry and amazing flow. Loved the whole feel and flow of this wonderful piece. excellent, Good luck in the contest hun, Bunny

  • pozo
    October 25, 2006
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    This was a good poem although I found the wording a little complex in places. I liked the imagery here. This was a good natural poem. I liked the grace of ‘ballet on boughs’. I felt there was a bit of a spiritual aspect to this poem. This used good rhyme and was quite a soft write. I found it a little dark in places. I liked your use of alliteration.
    All the best
    Pozo

  • Kari gold member
    October 25, 2006
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    deep

    I loved that last part..you've penned this beautifully and what a unique background to go with it Good luck in the contest sweetheart

    Kari


  • FifthDove
    October 25, 2006
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    Thank you very much dear poetman
    for the applaud and comment.
    I so very much appreciate it


  • individuality gold member
    October 25, 2006
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    a lovely piece ehre, rich in imagery, flowing very smoothly. i wish that you have good luck in the contest you have entered. spill ink and twist me into the crazy shape of love...

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