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A Halloween Tale

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They didn't believe the stories of old,
just stupid tales they had been told.


So for Halloween this year they had a plan,
for Grady, Rebecca, Penelope and Stan.


Thomas and Bob are this nights hosts,
hoping to scare with more than just ghosts.


So they all met in the old cemetery,
just the start to make everyone wary.


With flashlights in hand they headed for the place,
telling the old tales to make their hearts race.


The old hospital stood dark, up on the hill,
just the mere sight caused blood to chill.


Entering into a long dark hallway,
the hosts felt creepy, to their dismay.


Thomas and Bob had made special preparations,
hoping to surpass their intended expectations.


It wasn't very long before things weren't going right,
something else was in control on this dark Halloween night.


They heard scrapping and rattling of things all around,
terror was building because of these sounds.


Thomas and Bob were now trying hard to explain,
their composure was slipping, getting harder to maintain.


Screams tore through the darkness as their bodies were grabbed,
blood began to pour as they were repeatedly stabbed.


Penelope passed out when she was impaled on a hook,
her poor tormented body so violently shook.


Thomas and Bob were tied together, back to back,
bound so securely, without any slack.


Something wet and cold was being thrown on them,
then the searing shock from their feet to brain stems.


Rebecca was being chained under Penelope on the floor,
so as her friend was dissected, she was covered in the gore.


If that wasn't bad enough, when she attempted to speak,
her tongue was cut out and pierced onto her cheek.


Hysterical laughter combined with their screams,
this was much worse than most horrific dreams.


All this had been arranged by Grady and Stan,
who in their minds had devised the most perfect plan.


This was retribution, for always being mistreated.
They watched the place burn, their mission completed.

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"Cannibal Corpse"
Written October 25th, 2006

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  • thelovesongwriter
    June 22, 2007

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    this poem is wonderful! and that picture is disguesting, but awesome!!!!!!!!!! i loved it. kudos, kudos


  • Synthetic-Nightmare
    June 22, 2007

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    this......

    IS FUCKIN TWISTED SHIT! I LOVED IT! ADORED IT! Kudos, oh oh, this line was BEYOND BRILLIANT:

    "Rebecca was being chained under Penelope on the floor,

    so as her friend was being dissected, she was covered in the gore"

    YAY! haha, very dark and eery feel to it. Good luck!

  • dumbgothkid
    December 10, 2006

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    THis is great. Horror, blood, gore, insanity and even slightly vengence. I love it.

    If that wasn't bad enough, when she attempted to speak,
    her tongue was cut out and pierced onto her cheek.

    My favouriyte part.
    Thanks for entering and good luck.


  • Wayne Leon Learmond
    October 26, 2006
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    wonderful writing

    DARKLY BEAUTIFUL. Wonderful images here. Blood is overflowing in this piece. Reminded me a little of the HellRaiser films. Twisted and dark tale this is. I could just see the deserted hospital as well, with it's long, dark corridors. Cold and eerie. Well done for this brilliant piece.


  • JeannieD Hunter gold member
    October 25, 2006
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    Thanks Ron, it is a very sick and twisted tale!! The picture freaks me out!! My husband loves this stuff!! MEN!! Jeannie
    Edited on Oct 25, 9:50 p.m. because ''.


  • Sgt B
    October 25, 2006
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    Hahaha I LOVED it! very discriptive & nice flow was just rolling off the screen. I liked the storyline keep me glued. Good job, Good luck ~Ron~

  • Revwilliamfoos
    October 25, 2006
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    oh it was beautiful it gave me a tear to my eye but when penny gets hooked i think it was was and not had i could be wrong keep doing well
    love your friend the papa


  • JeannieD Hunter gold member
    October 25, 2006
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    Thanks baby!! This is a great compliment coming from the master of macabre! Jeannie


  • DarkHunter
    October 25, 2006
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    Sick and Twisted

    DARK, SICK and AWESOME. The picture makes you want to vomit and the whole piece is bloody brilliant. Can't praise you enough on this horror filled write. Bravo and best of luck.

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