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Mangled Budgie (Quinzaine)






Mangled budgie, beak fell off,

 

...How could this happen?


Heard dog cough.




Author notes

Quinzaine: 3 lined verse. Syllable count: 7, 5 & 3.
Budgie: Small talkative bird usually kept as a family pet, similar in size to a canary but more colourful.
True story.

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  • Darianna
    April 28, 2008

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    *snorts* This is funny!!! The rhythm and the rhyme add to it so well! So sorry for your loss...honest...

    Dari xxx

  • Judith Chandler
    January 13, 2008

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    This is funny, I think, even though the budgie's gone. I like the way you imply what happened. Actually you don't specify whether the bird is dead or just injured but that doesn't detract from your write.

    I like the form but it might be helpful if you define "quinzaine" in your notes.

    Thank you for you entry.


  • Edna Sweetlove
    January 10, 2008

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    A slight non sequitur perhaps, methinks, already? I would love to see a budgie without a beak. How would the little f*cker eat his seed?


    • Blankscreen2222
      January 11, 2008
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      unfortunately it's seed eating days we sadly over there and then, the little f*cker was mangled to death.


  • DancingRed
    August 23, 2007

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    Nice piece. I think the length suits the topic well -- witty & funny.
    Thanks for entering.

    DancingRed.


  • Mc25
    August 6, 2007

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    This piece is funny but it is not even close to 50 words Also i didn't see any emotion in this poem. Be sure to read the rules next time


  • xxRainbowDawnxx
    February 5, 2007

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    Awww the poor Budgie got eaten by the doggie... The doggie had a bird over for tea... That sounds like gansta doesn't it. The Dogg had a bird over for tea... imao, I'm so easily amused.


  • Dead Star--x
    January 30, 2007
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    lol nice little laugh i got it but what exactly is a mangled budgie? a type of bird? or made up creature? but ha! i do like this a lot, go figure dogs will EAT anything!!! thanx for entering!
    *Abused *


  • LilMrsAttitude
    January 21, 2007

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    Nice quinzaine

    A little short for my contest... at least 7 lines. But good luck in all of the contests you have entered.


  • angelfruitcake
    January 2, 2007
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    Cute good luck on the contes


  • Asylaarix
    December 14, 2006

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    short sweet and to the point lol ... good job ... good luck ... btw what's a budgie? lol stupid question but needs to be answered lmao ... im dumb lol don't mind me ... just answer lmao


  • star lunatic
    December 3, 2006
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    Haha! thanks for this one. Oh, you forgot to write in the author's box which option this is for. It will help the readers know which one this is for.

    Thanks a lot and good luck!


    ~~~Tal~~~


    • Blankscreen2222
      December 3, 2006
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      Hi.
      Sorry, forgot to include the option.
      It is Option 6. I've amended my authors note box.
      Blank


  • sarajaneUK
    December 1, 2006
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    hehehe. love it!

  • Billbard silver member
    October 29, 2006
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    Thanks for your entry.


  • Blankscreen2222
    October 26, 2006
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    (HaHaHa...) I know it's not funny, (The poor little hamster awww..) but somehow, misfortunes and antics with animals always seems to make me laugh my head off.
    I think it's the expressions on their faces after something bad has happened that sets me off.

    Thanks for reading :-)

    Blank.


  • individuality gold member
    October 26, 2006
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    lol poor little budge, makes me think of a hamster i ahd years ago it was sniffing under the door where the cat was in the next room and the cat sensed it there, and swiped its paw under the crack, it caught the hamster and ripped its eye out, not funny really at the time as i loved that little hamster but yeah i know its not a budgie and a cat but that's what your poem here made me think of


  • Blankscreen2222
    October 26, 2006
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    Thanks James :-)
    I like writing humour, it keeps me 'normal' I don't think!! LOL.haha

    x Blank.


  • Congruence
    October 26, 2006
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    Very Good

    Cool - like it - short - funny - great!

    James
    x

  • Blankscreen2222
    October 25, 2006
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    > Could I have the beak?

    FFS!!! PMSL.
    Blank


  • The X Man
    October 25, 2006
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    Could I have the beak?


  • Blankscreen2222
    October 25, 2006
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    LOL Mr F. ;-)

    Where is your sense of compassion for the poor old budgie?
    (just kidding.)

    Thanks for reading. :-)

    Blank


  • Mr Fluent 4 Fun
    October 25, 2006
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    Poor budgie

    Hi B

    This is very funny.

    Good luck in the contest.

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