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God's soldier

"I am God's soldier" he states with mock conviction.
He comes to my house to force his religion.
"Only god can save me" I state with a smile.
He says "Son listen for just a little while".
So I hear him out but don't feel shit.
I think of hitting him until god makes me quit.
I know this won't happen,god wouldn't interfere.
So why do I allow him to whisper in my ear?

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Option # 2
Written October 25th, 2006

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  • neon nightmares
    August 29, 2007
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    sounds like the Jahovas whitneses to me. I don't really agree with religion so I don't tend to let anyone try and tell me their religion is right.
    I do however want to hit them until I make them forget about 'god'
    Anyway.... rambling now

    Great write, love the way you have went about it. keep it up
    hugs
    xx


  • Dragonia
    August 16, 2007

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    Because it is the kindess that god gives us all. Personally I do not beleive in god. Only in spirit. But enough of that the general Idea is perfect. Most religions keep to themselves and whisper their goals. I love that you give him a personality that lingers the soldier that is. As if he is rude and condesending but afraid.
    ~Dragonia~


  • WhatsErName
    August 14, 2007
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    Wonderful and oh so true!


  • Lowell Poe
    August 10, 2007

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    Remember this? If Jesus saves, well then he better save himself,
    from the glory, glory seekers,
    who use his name in death.

    Just what the American Indians thought when they saw us and we shoved our God right down the fucking throats.
    We told them to look up the we pulled the rug out from them. GREAT , GREAT WRITE. GOOD insight. not as a chess move, but with great regard I must add you to my favorites also.DON'T CHANGE IT.

    BLESSINGS,
    LOWELL POE

  • unraveled
    February 25, 2007

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    Hey this is good. I like the title and you have a powerful presentation in such a short poem. I feel the same way, I hate when people come door to door like that


  • moonspider
    November 14, 2006
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    I dont think it is contradictive either, although it is short, it is a very powerfull piece. well done

  • StonerChica
    November 14, 2006
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    I like it alot, i dont think its contradictive, i mean you can believe in god and not follow a religion, i do. i believe in god, were cool and have a good relationship, but i hate religion particularly those who try to push theirs on you. good job and good luck.


  • Chrysalis
    November 14, 2006
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    it's like a question of faith. Some how from the start and to the finish I see that confussing. Not the poem but it's meaning or the content.

    good luck with the contest

    blessed be
    -Sky019-


  • Piper77
    October 25, 2006
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    Hmm, interesting. This is really cool. It was kinda contradictive, but in a respectful way. I loved that. Awesome write and keep writing!

    *snap*

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