I realize that selfishness
is just as powerful as love
and to hold someone close
can hold them back
You were my unicorn
the one thing supposedly untouchable
now I know why
and I hate myself for letting go
I have to
and throughout my days
from this one forth
I will dream of you
I will bleed in my soul for you
these words you will never hear
I don't want you to be sad
this is a choice I will live
and you will move on
it is time for me to let you go
I want you to be happy
even if it is not with me
please be happy
please move on
I have no more songs
no more rhymes
just honesty
two years in the making
my hands will never forget the touch
even when they hold another
and although my heart may not heal
yours will
forget about me
please
forget about me
Author notes
option 1
Maybe if my hearts stops beating it won't hurt this much...
This piece was converted from a letter I wrote. When I joined the army reserves I left everything in waiting. In the middle of training I talked to "her". She told me to forget about her. I found trying to move on so dificult...
After finding someone new I moved to another state. In a visit back home, I ran into my past love. She said she was wrong to tell me to forget about her, and she wanted to be with me, but it was too late. I was already comited to someone els. I told her to forget about me...
I'll always love her. I've tried not to, but something keeps her in my thoughts. She actualy read this piece, after I found her online... You can read her reply- Her name on AP is "Clotho"...
Hoping to talk to her again someday,
Bryan K Johnson.
A contest entry
- Lost Love by Dancing Feather.
500 points, ended March 10, 2007, 35 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Broken Love/Found Love by DeepinRage.
300 points, ended August 8, 2007, 21 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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this is so sad and powerful...thanks for entering...good luck in the contest...
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I really like this piece...very powerful and straight forward!
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WOW.
This is an amazing poem. I love it. <3
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They say if love has wings, set it free
I think this is one beautiful poem even though it personally is sad for you...there are times when we have to make drastic decisions in our lives and keep to them with no turning back...I feel you let her go because you thought it best for her but thats not always what is best, if she loves you, she wouldn't want to be set free of you, she would rather have the roller coaster ride with you at her side, that's my thoughts anyway
I'm wondering why you let her go when you still want to dream of her, hoping she will be happy with someone else instead of you....this confuses me as the reader of this wonderfully written poem, which has a lot of emotion running through it...I love the ending...those few lines actually made my eyes smart...
A most enjoyable read, thank you for sharing such a personal experience with us all
Love and smiles
~Lilac ~f
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This is such a simply written poem, yet so beautiful and heart-wrenching... What an emotional piece this is - well done!
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Truly beautiful
The sentiment of this poem is really beautiful. There is a good flow to the poem and you have expressed your feelings well.
Very touching and I think is she had read this she would never have been able to move on at all.
Let the ink flow and your fingers dance.
Rosemary -
amazing and extremely moving
This poem touched deep into my soul and woke something within that I had longed for. I love how this poem moves. It ebbs and flows just as emotions should. The one thing that you forgot was that no one forgets true love; for those lucky ones that experience it. You may try hard but it is impossible to forget. And don't worry, she has not forgotten nor forsaken you. She has kept you close to her heart, safe and ever comforting. And as always, loved.
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I thought you wold never get a chance to read this. I'm glad you did, and the words you say are what I needed to hear.
Thank you.
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Wow
Touched home with me...thanks for opening up my lost soul....Awesome write...thanks!!!! and Thanks again....
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Hunny ... this is so sad ... so emotional ... you make me cry inside for you ... But if you feel this is the right thing to do ... t hen you must do what you must do to make things right with yourself ... you know you are always a big part of my heart ... and when your hurting i am hurting ... keep smiling babe ... everything will get better in due time you will see LOVE YA HUN
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This is a good poem. definatly in the finalists. nice job.
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Sad. I can relate to this very much so. Keep up the good work, and, good luck
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I have no more songs
no more rhymes
just honesty
two years in the making
I loved this part. Thank you for sharing -
amazing. absouloutly amazing. its so powerful and very well written. You are very talented and I'm so glad you entered my contest. thanks
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Brilliant. I really liked the imagery when you wrote that even when you hold another you wont forget her touch.
that was strong, extreemly well written.
Great job,
rah -
REMARKABLE!!!!!!!!!!! AWESOME WRITE GOOD LUCK IN THE CONTEST THOUGH THIS POEM DOESNT NEED IT ONE BIT THANKS FOR SHARING IT...WRITE ON ROCK ON READ ON!!!
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This is a great poem, I even feel some of those feelings. I love how you use a unicorn to compare the untouchable feeling of love. Thanks for writing in the contest and sry I didn't comment sooner.
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wow this was deep!
beautifully writty and very moving. very sad.
i hate how it feels to have to let go of someone...i need not say more except for this was an amazing piece!
thank you for sharing this,
take care!
♥lynn -
Abdul Tawala Ibn Ali Alishtari
I agree with my niece that you have filled yourself up with loss asking for what you do not want but choosing nobility are then trapped by that act.
Abdul Tawala Ibn Ali Alishtari -
perfect
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Amazing!!!!
Wow!!!!!!!!!!!!This is the most unselfish act of love one can give!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!Is to let go when love is still running so deep within your veins for this person. I hope that one day you will love another completely and then this person will become a bittersweet memory, a growing pain so to speak. A stepping stone in your journey to be loved in return as deeply as you have given love in this write!!!!!!!!! Unselfih love can be quite painful as you have related here and I hope this person realizes the depth of love you have for them before they completely sever romantic ties with you. But rest assured I belive being this type of person, it won't be long before someone else move in to snatch you up because you sound like a great person by the way this is written. Good luck and happiness to you my friend!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!Toni
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Wonderful expression of words. Letting go and moving on is one of the hardest things to do. But life goes on just as in any situation. And I am sure that with every situation in life when we move on, we move on with so much learned and memories to last a lifetime.......Great pen......I enjoyed...
Smiles
your way >>>>>> Sandy 
San-d
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a touching piece of love, letting go, moving on....
Very well written and enjoyable to read...even tho the pain and sorrow penetrates the reader.
Well done.
Rory -
two thumbs up
that was very heart felt and real. and very well written. two thumbs up. -
and although my heart my not heal
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awwww, you're to precious to forget, if i was in love with u selfish or not, or even if u made many flaws i can't move on, i won't be happy with someone else if i was with you, like a bird in the nest, it won't fly off to another nest, it'll stay where it is, i understand this very sorrowful poem, incredible indeed, but remember, never let go of someone even if u think you are hurting that person, let her go when she wants to break up with you, if u just let her go like that u never know what you're letting go and you're only hurting yourself, keep her unless she doesn't want you anymore. -
Self sacrifice for love...yours or hers...such a hard thing.... I have been in this place many times... ha...unfortunately always the one making the sacrifice... Love hurts as they say...
Wonderful write..
Cheers
JAG <3 -
Hi, I had the impression she has found someone else, well if so pick yourself up, we love more than once in life or the majority do, yes it hurts a lot at the time, but time is a great healer, the right person will arrive even if you do not believe it at this moment, all the best, Di
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this was a beautiful heartfelt write, though i did notice some errors i would like to point out since this is entered into a contest-to edit and make perfect for placing
fourth stanza line one-Hear instead of here
seventh stanza line three- may instead of my
third line from ending- add the "t" onto forge
one more thing and this may be just my opinion, but in the fourth stanza you write:
"this is a choice I will live
and you will move on"
I didnt quite understand it...maybe you need to put some commas or periods throughout the piece to make it flow better, and not run together.
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Well Done with emotions that come to life. To let a love one go is a true deed of love for any reason. And yet to hold the invisable love within your heart shows love does go on. Thanks for sharing this..
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There is something majestically sad and honorable about these words. What I would expect is that in your plea to have this person to forget the writer of this, I would imagine that these powerful words came from an unforgettable heart.
We are a naturally selfish lot. We love things and use people; I have been guilty of this all too often.
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the strengh to write this
and inturn to let go takes alot
well done
for both letting go and for the write
it was a great poem
its not that easy to let go
believe me when i say this
letting go is better then holding on
becasue if u and this person are truly meant to be
then eventurly they will be the one holding on to you
but still a gd write
powerful
strong
and meningful
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Wow what a wonderfully sad and hopeful poem. You show love hope and release. I know what you mean. It's so hard to let go completely. I really like what you have done here. Best of luck to you in the contest.
ttyl Tali
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If you love someone let them free... this is so hard to do for the one who has to let go. You deserve a prize for being able to let this person go and try to move on. Beautiful sentiment here.
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oh my goodness you just wanna make me cry dont, all about letting go cause sometimes the best way to love someone is to not love them at all, beleive me i know all about that awesome job!
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That was so sweet but yet so sad. You have written a wonderful piece. Good luck in the contest!
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Darling
Your lips speak lies
for you want reverse
despite all your disguise
in your stated verse.
Hurt is your life
holding and releasing too
full of sad strife
either way you rue.
Smoosh
Janet
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