Once when i was but a child
I would watch the mystical sky
My imagination would float in wonderment
How did it all come to be, and why?
Sometimes i would make a secret wish
Upon the smallest glittering star
I would wish for love and happiness
In a future then that seemed so far~
Sometimes I'd watch a jettisoned falling star
As it came streaking toward Earth without a sound
Would it cause a wondrously magical commotion
When it finally reached the ground?
Although the innocent days of my childhood
Have disappeared among the changing seasons,
The vast nebulous sea of blackness above me
Still challenges my mind with question and reasons~
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Written May 2nd, 2003
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BEAUTIFUL
very well written -
Great poem!!
Susan,
This is a great poem... I could just see it, and lemme tell you, it was beautiful. You are a great writer and I hope to read more of your work!
Lane -
i love your poems so so so much
your one of the best writes i know
god your good
and i love the pic you have choosen to every poem
//Michelle -
I like how, even having not found the answers as a child, you continue to question. Enjoyed this one a lot. Nice writing.
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very nice....lots of questions....lots of pretty things to look at, but will there ever be answers? sure there are...all the time, but we're just too blindsighted to see them when they hit us, and then with our newly acquired knowledge, we are not happy, we need another answer to another question, perhaps harder this time, but always seeking an answer....nice writing
peace
chris -
Oh I loved this!!! It brought back so many memories..and not too distant ones either!! LOL I still look up at the sky, as I did as a child, and wonder how it all came to be and what's really out there...it's awesome and breathtaking..as is this write!! superbly done Susan!!
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Excelent
I love this poem I still look up into the night sky and wish for all of those things this poem is wonderful.
thank you for your comment on my poem "witch" Its always appreciated.
-Aurora M -
the rythm was a little off in places, but what can i say? you still captured the feeling of amazement and wonder very well! nice range of vocabulary and descriptions. well done!
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Sometimes I'd watch a jettisoned falling star... Susan, I think this one line would flow smoother if you changed the order of the words... Sometimes I'd watch a falling star jettisoned... but it may just be me.
A very profound piece. Such rich imagery. I love a star spangled sky.
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Truly picturesque wording with astounding flow in the entire piece. Done the same thing so many times myself. Though it always seems like few of my real wishes ever come true the way I would wish them too...lol. Thank you for the comment on Munir's piece '(dream of an old man)...I love that line myself. rosewishes for endymion
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Good write. Don't know how many people question things as such. good job, captured the sky in a net impossible to escape from.
hir -
Yes indeed a magnificent piece. The imagery is blinding, beautiful. Very well written, another excellent write.
Meg -
I use to be afraid of the moon... heehee... This was another great one... like a look into longlost secrets of an innocent child. Great job
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You haven't lost your youthful innocence ya nut. Ya just found new ways of showing it. This is a magnificent piece my dear. PPF's so rule. I miss ya. I'm glad you kept writing even when Sheryl and I couldn't. Hehehe. Keep em coming. I'm hoping to get back into it soon. As always, a powerful mixture of imagery, vocabulary, and passion.
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Love it, Sus. The imagery and the emotions...blend perfect with the flow. Power melding of child and adult...and that we don't loose the innocense, or the ability to question and to seek the truth.
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I still look up at the night sky. Looking up thee helps to put things back on earth into perspective. Beautiful poem Susan. You seem to have a way of putting my thoughts into your words. Marvellous talent.
~Von~ -
I really really loved the introduction! "Once when I was a child" It was beautiful, it was as if you were telling a story. You really portrayed the innocence of a child's mind, and the picture did a great job in adding effect. Fantastic I loved it!!!
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Great
Hi Susan, geez you get alot of comments, well this is beautiful hon shows the innocence of a childs mind and it being carefree.
Felt the sadness in the end......always know those questions are in Him sweetie the Lord and the reasons could be many.....But there is always one to help you through if you need or seek Him in that......Hugs Susan a amazing write you painted reality in this of the transformation between childhood and adult of changes.
Hugs,Sherry -
Beautiful!!!
Susan... First, of all I want
to say "Thank you for the comment
on my poem" And, second.... I want,
to say, how sorry I am about, your
illness... May, God, bless you!!!
in every, thing!!! you do!!!
Great, Poem!!! By, the Way!!!
Ha,
~Rena -
hello madam poetess!
you certainly captured a life passed by with this wonderful piece!
you tell of things we all remember, before we knew so "much" about the world around us...
blessed be
mike -
I agree with Kalexi, I love seeing the pictures you always put with your poems, and the poem was really good too:) I don't look up at the night sky as much anymore, but when I do, I'm always amazed at how beautiful the stars can be:)
very nice descriptions susan, and very well worded poem:)
kayla* -
I love this, Susan:) So happy to see the pictures from you again:D
Beautiful write,
Karen
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beautiful
Hallo Susan
Dearest Poetess - I also loved the night sky all my life ... who does not? I can relate to your poem; I am sure all can. Thank you for taking me back to those childhood years of yesteryear.
Love you,
Myra -
Tim and Sis Maureen
I thank you both for your compliments
Thanks heaven for nature
It certainly inspires me
Blessings
susan~ -
Thanks Lizardking for the comments
Yes i love to watch the meteor showers i never try to miss em
So beautiful in Ky to watch em:)
Blessings
Susan~ -
Thanks Mo and Mina for the comments i appreciate it
Also the hugs and prayers:)
Blessings
Susan~ -
Excellent!
Hi Sis! The night sky is mysterious and fascinating! I wish I lived in the country where I could see it better. Loved your poem...took me back to my childhood and the wonderment I felt then.
Love Ya!
< 3 Maureen
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Wow! Great piece here, yes, we always have nature to remind us, for it has not changed since our youth, I loved this much!!!
Thanks so much for sharing this with us all!!!
Keep up the great works here and pen on!!!
-Timothy
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Enthralling
Beautiful write. I too used to gaze up at the sky and me enthralled by the sheer distances to even the nearest objects I saw. I still do, and I'm still amazed; meteor storms are a sight to behold. -
i agree very well wrote Hon*
i could picture you looking up at the stars
when you were a young girl just wondering how everything
came to be
You took me back in time to a place where i too wished
upon the stars!
Love this Hon* Great stuff!.."beautful poetry"
Thinking of you *Sweety* i'll be saying a special lil
prayer for you! that things will soon be better
Love ya! and a Special Big Hug to You! hon*
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This piece is so calm and innocent in of it self. The manner in which it reads matches the message which was coming across. This is a very well writen piece. Do keep up the good work....because I'm always reading.
Lots of Love
Mojdeh
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