I saw a rose during one spring morning
Its skin as red as morning dew
A love I felt within my fingers
A love I thought would be so true
But yet I came back and it was gone
My heart would never learn to sing.....
It gave back my sorrow and my pain
Yet kept my everything
Author notes
Written October 24th, 2006
In a list
A contest entry
- GIVE ME YOUR BEST!!! ya know ya wanna! by infinitechaos07.
450 points, ended January 10, 2008, 41 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - ANYTHING SHORT by Blooming Poet.
400 points, ended March 7, 2008, 105 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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Is morning dew red??? That confused me. The wide array of relationships and emotions in here are pretty good, but they feel a little bit rushed or forced. Overall great poem.
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So sad, but lovely, too.
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thank you
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Such a lovely author page you have - just wanted to mention that to you- great background. Lovely outside things soon fade and are gone, yet the memory lingers; love can be lost just as easy.
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my my my!! interesting indeed. Ive never heard it so well expressed! i loved it love, it was absolutely enchanting :]
rain--x
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Wow
This is penned quite beautifully! Your point is so clear and so full of emotion. I think alot of us can relate to this poem. Very good job! Thanks for entering my contest, best of luck! -
Short and oh so bitterly sweet! Been here and I can relate! Beautifully written. Thanks for sharing!
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Thats great. I love its short simplicity, and it reminds me of my grandmother who loved roses. Thanks for sending me on a walk down memory lane. Great poem.
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This was so beautiful. I also think that this could be used for many metaphors. I love the rose as well
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I love the rose symbolism, and how delicate the poem is. The message came across in the simplest way. Well done.
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Dramatic Realism
I really enjoyed the lines "A love I thouht would be so true?But yet I came back and it was gone"
I feel like these could pertain to the liking of an individual, yet when they give you the opportunity to take their heart and you disregaurd or fail to jump on the opportunity, they move on, just like a flower which was once there in all of its glory and beauty, now missing because its been picked. Thanks for the read I enjoyed it
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Beautiful, with a distinct edge of sadness that enhanced it all the more. "A love I felt within my fingers / A love I thought would be so true ... It gave back my sorrow and my pain / You kept my everything"...Very deep and heartfelt words. I really enjoyed this piece of work.
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I like the clear, consisement of it. Beautiful wording.
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short and simple...straight to the point...I like it..maybe cuz i'm in a dark mood...lol..but i really like it...good work
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a traditional style of poetry. I forgot the name of it but this is good although i have a lack of understanding. But I literally felt the rose in the palm of my hand. I love the imagery.
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good!
I like it very much. It's short and simple, but with a little bit of flair. Good work on this, I like the idea behind it a lot.
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