And all you want is just to be heard.
When those sweet lips spill those sweet words
Onto the sparkling night sky.
Scream out your replies
Don't even know how good they sound
Straining to be heard, straining to be loved
Oh, I love you baby.
Author notes
Written October 24th, 2006
A contest entry
- Ever find yourself screaming at the sky? by Lauren Noir.
400 points, ended October 29, 2006, 23 entries
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Comments
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awww this is so sweet, sounds like the words I would just love to say to the person, who refuses to listen to them.
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Beautiful write, It had me thinking of all different things, as it captured such raw intent here. Though the last line threw me, it does remind me of the man I am currently listening to "Bob Dylan"
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A nice short little piece and gorgeous images created and a lovely mood, sweet and beauitful. Like a mignight staring at the sky. Lovwely. Well done
But I hate the words baby, It sounds so materialistic
Well done and good lcuk
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