I cried out
as i felt the searing pain
as i watched my heart break into a thousand pieces
I cried out
for you to love me again
as you did once before
I cried out
when i saw my life passed before me
as you were walking out the door
I cried out
for now i am left in the darkness
where once you stood
shining light into my life
You're gone
and i cried out for you
longing for then
hoping you were here now.
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Written October 24th, 2006
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My god these are the words I wish I chould speak to him...Awsome...Deserves what it gets
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Such raw emotions! Gosh I love your poems! May I suggest something? To possibly consider visually laying out the poetry a little more inconsistant-jaded in such a fashion. The reason why is because it's just line after line and so forth, however if you use your space bar: seperate some words, disjoint others....you could have a slightly improved fantasical piece before your very eyes! You don't have to take my suggestion seriously considering I only have three trophies but oh wellity.
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Wow makes me want to cry
good work one the poem luv
excellent work to express such emontion
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Thank You. Amazing how true feelings show in poems isn't it ?
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I really like it. It shows so much emotion and says so much! It is a great write!
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