Gently down the stream I rowed
Watching the drifting banks
The flowers, trees, animals and insects
All changing with every passing instant
Row, Row, Rowing My Boat
The water restful but chillily cold
With fish and creatures all abounding;
Try as I might with all my might
My eyelids gently start a closing
Gently Down The Stream
I dreamt of Honey and Clover soup
Just like my old Ma use to make
I dreamt of friends, comrades and colleagues
All talking to me in an ember
Merrily, Merrily, Merrily, Merrily
Now I can’t seem to come round
Blackness surrounds me, quite powerful;
As consciousness falls from me
I cease to be, little bit by little bit…
Life Is Now But A Dream
Author notes
(3) Write a poem of anger about society. What really annoys you?
I suppose it’s also:
(4) Write an account of a nursery rhyme/fairytale. Rewrite it but make it clear what you were inspired by. (Row, Row, Row Your Boat)
This is an option three poem, I wrote this a while ago now but it fits with your competition very well. It is furtive in it does not directly state its grievance against society. But in a nutshell we hide behind false truths and pleasant rebuttals, such as our attitudes to the planet and pollution.
I also twisted a Nursery Rhyme to convey the idea; interesting since nursery rhymes in general are nice but often hide a darker idea like Little Bo Peep, where the sheep have possible been killed but it is not directly stated and the child does not suspect, believing Bo Peep would find her sheep.
I also have a number of pre-posted poems that would have been suitable but I am sure that you have commented on them and as a favourite you deserve an original. Nice competition… …
Written October 24th, 2006
A contest entry
- Lots of Options, come and see (Contest) by pozo.
10000 points, ended October 28, 2006, 13 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
Comments
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This is really amazing! Says so much in this write. It is so true it can apply to society. Well done.
Jeannie -
Very good
This was in interesting take on the nursery Rhyme and quite good. Thank you for sharing. -
This was a good take on the nursery rhyme- since adulthood that poem's always reminded me of death too
I found this poem quite dark.
PS thanks for your advice. I've got someone at home to help me 'narrow down further' aside from that I want to be independent in my judgements
All the best
Pozo
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Nicely paraodied and put into deeper layers of meaning...
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