When you open your eyes to observe the sky
what do you find here and there?
It has more there
as from sky billions to run here and there
as human beings
they all contain characteristics
concerning the sky
and as usual you are lonely
and you cannot receive them
with your heart
that a sky is there upward fair an unknown concept
while you and me are the true sky
and cry for company of one another
but each time we are left as singles
limited in our own inventive galaxies
limited in our own interpretations of the sky
and its role to bless us with its eternal peace
although the sky upward is always our friend
and hears our prayers
the only error that the upper sky made is
that it made so many skies on this Earth as well...
Author notes
The true place of the sky is yet to be defined where the real sky is ?...and how it play a role to touch us and to make us its believer as well...?
A contest entry
- Picture Inspiration by CherylAnn.
500 points, ended April 11, 2007, 19 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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a nice revelation to what goes on in the sky!A galaxy of the unexplored,the unknown and the fascinating...A very interesting write dear poet...
Good Luck and thanks for entering
Blessings
~Cheryl~
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A nice job, different and interesting
You made a good job in putting your thoughts into this and expressing a lot of feeling into it as well
Deep and interesting
Well done and good luck
Thank you for entering -
very well thought about
truely fabulously done u cover a big area of this amazing natural thing called sky it can give you a different picture every minute as the clouds and the sun work hand in hand and agree with your comment
good luck in the contest
love & light Pauline -
A fascinating subject for a poem indeed. I think we all wonder what is up there and I find the night sky especially intriguing, with the myriad stars and the moon in all its phases. Your poem reflects all the thoughts of us mere mortals.
Ann -
what you find here and there? - maybe adding a do ? what do you find...
all they contain characteristics - this line would benefit if you removed the word 'they'
where you use 'limiting' i think 'limited' would flow much better.
at the end, lose the space between the ellipses and that last word so they are together. well...
a good poem here, you are always so positive in your thinkign which i enjoy. spill ink and twist me into the crazy shape of love...
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Prabhu... it's nice to see you again, I was hoping you would cast your vote in the New7Wonders! Check it out... I'll IM you with my suggestions. All the best, ea
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